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The Fire of the Sun -- Chapter Two

Feb 02, 2011 09:54

Title: The Fire of the Sun
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: T
Characters: Full cast (Jacob/Bella, Sam/Emily)
Genre: Romance/Angst/Wolfpack!Humor
Warnings: Language, violence, and references to adult behavior. See here for more details.

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Comments 68

greeneyed_me February 10 2011, 05:38:54 UTC

That whole part between Bella and Jake was awesome. I felt like I was actually there, voyeuristically watching...haha. I'm am quite interested in how this whole hickey thing turns out muahahaha!

audreyii_fic February 10 2011, 14:35:23 UTC

LOL. This wasn't supposed to be *nearly* so long, but JakeandBells just sort of got away from me. (I kept yelling at the screen, "Stop snuggling and move the plot along, you damn kids!" Then I got out a rake and chased squirrels off my lawn.)

Voyeurism is fun ;)

spoonz_10 February 10 2011, 07:23:45 UTC

Ah, hickies. So darn OBVIOUS. Yeesh. ;)

Oh Charlie and Billy. You two are almost as stubborn as I am. Almost.

Loved it! Can't wait for the next chapter. :D

audreyii_fic February 10 2011, 14:37:11 UTC

I know, tragically obvious plot device. It just sort of... happened. *cough*

Charlie and Billy are so much fun to fuck with. It's ridiculous how much I love playing with their relationship. Just be thankful I'm not a slashgirl or it could go weird places... I just prefer my bromances, you know?

Glad you liked :)

saucydeviant February 10 2011, 08:30:59 UTC

woooAAAHHHHhhhhhooooooo!

First off, I love the idea of Sam throwing the receiver, I guess we have to be nicer to him since the whole karma thing:) He gets cool points.

You also get brownie points for using topaz;)

I think I have a soft spot for Jasper and Sam's getting awesome, yayness!

mellyfrisco6 February 10 2011, 13:29:30 UTC

Okay. I just wanted to say that your avi ROCKS. That is all :)

saucydeviant February 15 2011, 06:29:16 UTC

thank you:)

audreyii_fic February 10 2011, 14:43:03 UTC

Sam did get cool points... though I think I was subconsciously trying to be mean to him by making him listen to nails on a chalkboard. Yeah, I'm still bitter.

I've had a soft spot for Jasper since seeing Eclipse; he was one of the very few number of bright spots. His eyeroll when Edward gets tackled by Carlisle was possibly my favorite single image of the movie.

gypseian February 10 2011, 08:58:29 UTC

My Southern accent sucks.

audreyii_fic February 10 2011, 14:47:04 UTC

Is it up? :)

And Southern accents are just a matter of counting to ten very slowly. That's how I slip in whenever I go to visit the family:

one

two

therree (this is where it starts to show)

fo-urr

fahve

seycks

sehvehn

ahight

nahn

teyun

At least, that'll get you a decent mountain accent. Jasper was Texan, right? I can't remember. Should probably look it up...

gypseian February 10 2011, 18:31:06 UTC

I figured since you put it up as late as you did and hadn't made your tweak run through it after its posting that I should wait a little. Also, fucking midterms. If I get my to-do list finished today, it'll go up promptly; just thought you might include the link beforehand as a reminder thingumy or something (didn't see it on the FFn, either).

I'm just afraid I'm gonna sound like Anna Paquin's Sookie Stackhouse. Even after one line in the last chapter, I was like "DAMMIT, JASPER. WHY COULDN'T YOU BE FROM JERSEY? I CAN DO A JERSEY ACCENT."

audreyii_fic February 10 2011, 19:13:30 UTC

Oh, yeah, that makes sense. I just crashed and didn't do any changes, oddly enough. I figured I'd add the link after the new bit gets posted, but you're right, I think I'll just add it when I post in the future.

FFn is a heartless bitch and doesn't allow links.

You can do Jersey? I'm impressed. I can't to save my life. Southern's no problem, though ;)

Thread 11

lezah_hctiw February 10 2011, 12:40:51 UTC

Your Jacob and Bella is just <3. But please don't make this like MotE. I don't think my patience can take it! :P

Your Bella is awesome in so many different levels but when she's with Edward.... eeew.

Thanks for the pick-me-up, I've just had a crappy day. Can't wait for the next chappie. Love it, hunny. :)

PS: Jessica is awesome.

audreyii_fic February 10 2011, 14:50:17 UTC

But please don't make this like MotE. I don't think my patience can take it! :P

*whistles*

Bella with Edward is a severely messed up Bella. You know, aside from the general whining, for those first fifteen pages of Twilight before Edward shows up I didn't hate her guts. And when she's around Jacob without Edward in the middle of New Moon, she's not so bad. Bella + Edward = Thoroughly Awful Bella. Offering forward the idea that maybe it's not all her fault...

Next chap is a whole week away, but that gives me time to write more Jessica the next few steps ;)