Remember that smut challenge?

[3scoremiles_10]

So. I tried the smut thing. Result? I don't think smut is my forte. I am not actually even sure if this qualifies for smut, but what the hell. I'll let you judge for yourself. And don't laugh!

Title: In the Dark
Summary: Hephaistion's wedding night ... because sometimes a man's gotta do what man's gotta do. ;)
Feedback: sure, why not.

Comments

[_penthesileia_]

Very nice, nothing like a good smut fic. Makes me long for soft-core porn scenes in the movie. Alas! :p The characterization of Hephaestion is pretty believable; it's probably within reason, considering his obsession with Alexander (and any personal proclivities) that he never would have slept with a woman.

I feel kind of sorry for Alex and Heph's wives really, if it isn't dancing eunuchs it's their husbands calling out other names at inappropriate moments.

[3scoremiles_10]

Well, at least Alexander's wives probably didn't have to worry about the dancing eunuch actually being in their marriage chambers. And as for Drypetis ... she was probably prepared for worse than her husband calling out the wrong name. Still, he managed at least. That's something, right? ;)

[florachan]

Well, you are right, it doesn't qualify for smut, but only because there is much more in it...^^

It's not only a sensual piece but's there is also a good bit of characterization in it, and I loved it..
I really feel pity for the poor girl...It must not have been easy to be Alexander' or Hephaistion's wife...
I loved the way you depicted the sexual scene on two levels: the one of Drypetis, and the scene happening in Hephaistion's mind; very original and also effective...

A great story, really!^^

[3scoremiles_10]

Yeah, like I said, I don't think smut in its purest sense is my forte. I actually didn't even think it was particularly sensual, so that's good to hear ... I thought it was too stilted and unsexy to be sensual, but that's because Hephaistion's feeling pretty bloody stilted and unsexy, bless. ;)

I have to say though I don't know how much their wives would have cared if their husbands fantasized about other people when they were together - these were purely political marriages after all, it's not like these women wed for love. And if a little fantasy lets the poor bastard get the job done, then everyone's a winner, right? Hehehe.

Re: Uh.

[3scoremiles_10]

:running after you with girl cooties: BRAT! ;)

[3scoremiles_10]

Definately good to see more interest out there - even if that turns out to be the only good thing that comes out of Stone's movie, it's always good when people actually look at the history behind the hype.

[_hiddenwolf_]

Hey that's a very good one for a start. It doesn't even look like to be a first attempt. You managed to give steamy sexual descriptions in both the m/f and the (imaginary) m/m scenes (seems you wanted to test yourself for both het and slash smut,at once).

Hephaestion's trail of thought was interesting and how his desire changes while following it. Your Heph is not bi (none knows if he was) so his effort (which was again for Alexander) was interesting to watch :p

Heh poor Drypetis lucky bitch , being left with a WTF in her head. I guess none had time to let her know

[3scoremiles_10]

It doesn't even look like to be a first attempt.

What are you implying, that I'm a closet smut-fiend? ;) Well, I will admit I have written a few sex scenes before, but I don't think I really capture the true nature of smut. Still, it was fun to try.

And Hephaistion? Yeah. So not bi. Definately have to give the boy points for effort, don't you think?

As for Drypetis ... not sure if anyone would have told her those sorts of sordid details about her future husband or not. The Persians took a fairly dim view of that kind of carry on between men, after all - maybe she honestly didn't know. Or maybe she did, but didn't think it was going to end up being an issue in her marriage bed, who knows? But yeah, I think that would be a WTF moment, for sure. ;)