Comments | astromecha: bumblebees. (ch2) re: akame.

astromecha

bumblebees. (ch2) re: akame.

Dec 16, 2007 00:06

bumblebees. (ch 2)
akame.
13,538 words.
31 pages.
chapter 1: here.
soundtrack: "one more night" by the stars (click to listen)

( Two years later, Kame fumbled for a cigarette with his frostbitten hands, shuddering in the icy wind that crystallized every particle in his skin with painful, crackling snaps. )

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Comments 51

314159 December 16 2007, 08:34:48 UTC

FISRST!!!! I WILS READ THIS WHEN IM NOT DRUNK!

astromecha December 16 2007, 08:38:37 UTC

*hands bottle of water and aspirin* ♥♥♥♥

314159 December 16 2007, 13:35:48 UTC

Okay, review tiemz! To start this off, let me say that I LOVED IT. IT WAS AMAZING. AND PERFECT. AND I CRIED. SAD TEARS AND HAPPY TEARS.

Later on that night, scrambling to hide cigarette smoke from several of their associate managers outside the hotel window, Jin set fire to his own letter and began shrieking hysterically.

I LOVE IT WHEN JIN SHRIEKS-- *kicked*

Yamapi paused. "It's been done." He said quietly, and with that snipped the first binding tie.

The Yamapi/Kame interaction in this fic is so bittersweet ;___; Poor Pi. PLAGUED BY HIS LOVE FOR KAME BUT UNABLE TO ACT ON IT!!! WHAT A HARD LIFE HE MUST LEAD. I'm sorry, I'm still a little off right now BUT AT LEAST I CAN TYPE :D!

"But you weren't," Kame mumbled, and let go softly, lip quivering, eyes glazed. "But you weren't."That was heartbreaking. The Jin/Kame fight scene was really well-done and really intense, I could picture it perfectly in my head. I could almost hear Kame screaming. :( Poor Kame, he is so fragile, and I should feel for Jin as well but I feel ( ... )

azeleghia December 16 2007, 09:36:34 UTC

Wow. No seriously just wow. This was really beautiful and i really liked it. I think i missed some of the meanings but that's only because i'm only 14 and i haven't read something as deep and meaningful as this before. But i really like your writing style and i could feel the emotion behind it. I expect such wonderful things like this chapter from you in the future (ooo pressure XD) <3

astromecha December 16 2007, 09:50:23 UTC

Thank you! ♥♥ Actually, this was the last chapter of the Bumblebees series, but akame is practically all I write, and the next one is coming up shortly, haha. I'm very flattered, and ecstatic that you enjoyed it, so thank you, again. (: (Aaah! The pressure to outdo my own fic!)

chrasy December 16 2007, 10:03:55 UTC

I think you just made me cry. OH MY GOD YOU DID! Akame!!! *wails*

astromecha December 16 2007, 11:14:50 UTC

Aaaaah! I am sorry! I mean-- well, it is unbelievably flattering to the story that you cried, so generally I am actually ecstatic, but I do apologize! *offers tissue?* I am glad you enjoyed it. ♥♥

naruchu December 16 2007, 10:09:28 UTC

omgomg. I want to cry. The ending was so happy and I want to cry because it was so beautiful.

Everything was so real and raw that when the line 'Jin loves you' came up, I was a little jolted, because in this reality. This reality, Jin doesn't actually, as we know it, love him. But only such a plain, powerful statement could make me think that this was a story and not Yamapi and Kame and Jin themselves dissecting their own hearts.

I would really, definitely love to comment on this more thoroughly because there's just so here I could probably learn a life lesson or something.

♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ BBL ♥♥♥♥ hopefully.

naruchu December 16 2007, 10:31:07 UTC

Oh, and I think that song just got 13,538 times better because of your fic <33
No offense to the song. *sighs*

astromecha December 16 2007, 11:12:35 UTC

You are always very honest about anything I write, and I can't thank you enough. ♥ There are things I wish I could have rewritten, other things I would have liked to put in there (you wouldn't believe it -- I actually had to cut out one or two scenes because it was too long for LJ! what! cries!), but that would be just a bit anal on my part, haha.

I am happy I could give you a happy ending though! I think you were one of the first to read chapter 1, and that 6 months later you are still here-- slkdfjsaklf! ♥♥ *cuddles* More fic, I promise. I'm on break so I have no excuses! *...takes note to finish your request!*

naruchu December 16 2007, 11:23:30 UTC

No. That was in fact. shizzical both times (first). SHIZZICAL!! *shakes cyber-fist*

ad;fadkfj You could have posted it in a successive entry? But if you don't think it affected the story so much, what you've posted is perfectly enough.

I'm honest because your writing makes me feel like you're telling the truth, too.

Ahh, thank you for remembering my request! I look forward to it 109%

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languishindecay December 16 2007, 10:29:59 UTC

OHHH MY GOOODDDDD, IT'S HERE.

yessss, resolution.
but at the same time, oh, selfless yamapi, ilu, please don't be sad.

ugh, this was so beautiful. i can't wait for your upcoming projects ♥

astromecha December 16 2007, 11:16:02 UTC

FIIIIINALLLLLLLLYYYY! I take so long to write anything of substance. Sigh. ):

Poor Pi. I owe him, really. He will get it made up to him in my next fic! Which should be out....in a day or so. *finishes!!* Thank you again, I am glad you enjoyed it. :) ♥♥

languishindecay December 16 2007, 11:21:43 UTC

it's okay, the stuff you put out is beautiful and it doesn't matter if you take long to write it...and omg, happiness for yamapi :) ♥♥♥ yeahy, i'll be on the lookout for it :)