Sweet Charity Fic: Finished!
Okey-dokey! Here it is, at last: the story I wrote for Sweet Charity this year. And, man, am I ever glad I opted for the longest deadline this time! This was written for jhall1, who first said he'd like a classic Who story, then suggested that he might like to see my version of a "Journey's End" fixit, or, as I believe he put it, Donna getting
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Very cute, astro!
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Loved this bit: "No," said the Doctor. "It was simply the easiest, safest, most sensible option. Which doesn't really sound like me."
thanks for sharing this with us!
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I thought that you caught the voices of all three characters perfectly. I LOLed at: "People frequently looked at him strangely; he'd no idea why."
I wonder if perhaps Seven failed to fully suppress the memory of what he did to help Donna, so that Ten knew that it would happen when he took Donna's memories. That would then put Ten's action in a much more sympathetic light.
I didn't spot any typos, perhaps because I was too grabbed by the story. (I did think that I had found one, but it turns out that spelling "garrote" with only the one "t" is a valid spelling in the US.)
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And not only does Donna get what she deserves, but so does Wilf.
I hadn't originally intended to include him at all, really, but when it came down to it, I just couldn't leave him out. And I absolutely agree. I've always wanted to see him getting a trip on the TARIDS.
I thought that you caught the voices of all three characters perfectly.
Despite my uncertainly about writing Donna, I enjoyed it very much, and I always have fun writing Seven.
I wonder if perhaps Seven failed to fully suppress the memory of what he did to help Donna, so that Ten knew that it would happen when he took Donna's memories.
It's possible. It's also possible that, even if he didn't remember consciously, his subconscious knowledge influenced his actions. I think that's one of those questions of interpretation than can be happily left up to the individual reader. :)
I didn't spot any typos, perhaps because I was too grabbed by the story.Told ya I had an excellent beta. :) (But, man, do we automatically expect typos in ( ... )
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But, man, do we automatically expect typos in my stories?
I'm so good at spotting typos that I expect to find some in every story, whoever the author is. However I generally find fewer in your stories that in most people's.
BTW, don't forget to go to Sweet Charity to let them know that you've completed the story. And you'll probably also want to upload it there.
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Well, I've written stories that have involved me tearing my hair out and swearing a lot which I think came out pretty well, and which readers have liked. But, really, even that is sort of a perverse form of enjoyment. :) Probably the best way of putting it is that a story that's boring to write is usually also boring to read. And I have also done of a few of those, I'm sorry to say.
However I generally find fewer in your stories that in most people's.
*blushes* They do seem to crop up with frustrating frequency, though. Usually just after I've posted the darned thing. :)
BTW, don't forget to go to Sweet Charity to let them know that you've completed the story.Actually, I just went over there, and the page to register it as "done" is asking for a "bidding code." Did you get a bidding code? It's possible you might need to do it. Which makes sense, I guess, as I could always claim I'd written you something when I hadn't ( ... )
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And yes, very good Donna voice, down to her switching into DoctorDonna as her memories return - "Of course! Neural compression algorithms! Oh, nice! Very nice! Must've been how the Master did all that body-snatching, hmm?" - hmm, she's channelling the First Doctor, too?
And it's interesting, when we get the Doctor's PoV, how self-aware, or rather selfs-aware he is, comparing his present incarnation with past and future ones, conscious of his own emotions but damping them down in public.
I like the water metaphor - in a way, that does bring in Ace, because of Battlefield (which I associate all the more strongly with the Doctor and Ace because of the story about McCoy saving Aldred from drowning when he realised the stunt was going wrong). And the complex simplicity, and Donna's "poetic justice" about him having to suppress his own memories ( ... )
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hmm, she's channelling the First Doctor, too?
Well, deep down, aren't all Doctors the First Doctor, really? ;) (I think in my mind's ear, though, that particular syllable was probably more Donna than Doctor.)
And it's interesting, when we get the Doctor's PoV, how self-aware, or rather selfs-aware he is, comparing his present incarnation with past and future ones,
I personally suspect that Seven is one of the most introspective of the Doctors, and may perhaps have a better perspective on this stuff than most.
in a way, that does bring in Ace, because of Battlefield
Oh, hey, that's rather nice. I hadn't even thought about that! Actually Ace gets a lot of water imagery associated with her... It's stronger in "Fenric" than in "Battlefield," even.
The only trouble with this story is that I now want to read an adventure of the Seventh Doctor, Donna and WilfOh, that would be aweseome. I sincerely doubt I'll write it, alas, but I hereby cheerfully give permission to anybody who wants to write ( ... )
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Maybe she met him, too, and those memories are so well suppressed neither has worked it out yet!
How could I forget about Ace's dive in Fenric? I suppose because the McCoy-Aldred story makes Battlefield my first association for Ace + water.
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I love the following, and the always-packed bag:
And why on earth should she react that way to a story about a couple of idiots in a time-travelling phone booth?
the words kept trying to translate themselves into some strange foreign language in her head.
The way she figured it, his future self owed her so big that the only way he was going to pay off that debt was by starting now, before he incurred it.
"I'll have to suppress my own memories," he said softly. "Of everything we've done together."
Oh, very nice explanation for why he doesn't remember her later in his life. I was actually wondering about that.
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Oh, very nice explanation for why he doesn't remember her later in his life. I was actually wondering about that.
I think him suppressing or erasing memories of encounters with his other selves is at least semi-canonical. At least, I'm pretty sure they mentioned it in "Time Crash," and "semi-canonical" is exactly the word I'd use for that. :) So it seemed reasonable to me.
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