Comments | asthenie_vd: Random, part VII

asthenie_vd

Random, part VII - The libido awakens.

Jan 17, 2016 20:04

I actually managed to continue this sporking within a month, for once! Aren't you all happy? ;)

In case you need a refresher about what's going on, here's where you find all previous parts in this series:
Part I    Part II
Part III    Part IV
Part V    Part VIGet ready for part VII, in which Bert the Friendly Pirate fails ship ( Read more... )

sporking, books, age of sail

Comments 6

hamsterwoman January 17 2016, 21:18:58 UTC

What if the perpetual friction from our never-ending fucking sets the boat on fire?”

Is that... Is that a real line? O.o

asthenie_vd January 17 2016, 21:21:07 UTC

No, but I'm not too shocked you'd think that! XD

hamsterwoman January 17 2016, 21:24:22 UTC

Heh. Well, after everything else, I wouldn't have been *too* surprised if it had been :P

Very entertaining sporking! I don't know a thing about ships, but the sudden!precognition and the friendly pirate stuff was great!

asthenie_vd January 17 2016, 21:38:52 UTC

Anything in bold type in the quote boxes is my addition, but yeah, it would be something I could imagine these guys saying. *g*

I'm glad you were entertained. ^^ I don't think I'll ever be over "we're in the final act, but oh, our MAIN CHARACTER is a clairvoyant, btw." The book kinda missed an opportunity to do some more foreshadowing there.

verecunda January 17 2016, 22:52:51 UTC

Oh, look at all these convenient things being crammed into the final act in the last minute. The convenient Lascar fighting skillz! The convenient(?) powers of prophecy inherited from the fey Irish grandma! I think I remember chortling out loud at that particular bit. You'd think Will could just make mind-contact with his Tuatha Dé Danann cousins and get them to come winging to the rescue. But apparently not. Ach, well.

I'm not averse to fantasy elements in historical fiction, but I'd prefer them to be indicated a bit sooner than this! It's not so much a suspension of disbelief here as a gallows-drop.

And it's a sad remark on your main character if the most proactive thing he does throughout the course of the story is throw up over the villain. At least it puts Adrian off for a while. If only he'd thrown up on him sooner!

"Because I know how it feels to live without hope. It makes death look too easy.And all the readers who had never seen "The Even Chance" promptly frowned, scratched their heads, and flicked back through the book ( ... )

asthenie_vd January 18 2016, 17:38:38 UTC

I'm not averse to fantasy elements in historical fiction, but I'd prefer them to be indicated a bit sooner than this! It's not so much a suspension of disbelief here as a gallows-drop.

Absolutely. I love Age of Sail related Fantasy, but for that I need the magic alluded to earlier. This is not a Fantasy novel. It's a pseudo-historical that switches genres in its last third and not even to any great effect, since it's not like Will does anything with his powers, and they remain the only supernatural power in the entire novel. The only purpose his visions serve is so he can enjoy an extra page of angst and the readers fear for the woobie's survival.

And all the readers who had never seen "The Even Chance" promptly frowned, scratched their heads, and flicked back through the book just to make sure they hadn't missed something. The sloppiness, it hurts ussss, precioussss.Right? It's just so lazy ( ... )