My first publication!
Well ok - I may have been in year 4 at the time. The bold is the bit we were all given, the rest is mine. All formatting and punctuation is consistent with the original.
Late one autumn night, Tom and Kevin were going to visit Club Bluff. On the way their car broke down. "Don't worry," said Tom, I'll use the mobile to ring the R.A.C.V." Unfortunately, the R.A.C.V. were too busy to help.
"Well, it doesn't look like were going to Club Bluff," said Kevin. They got their things out of the car and started walking down the highway at about midnight arrived at a hotel and decided to stay there that night.
The next day borrowed two horses from the stables next door. It took two hours to get to the hearest car yard. "We're here at last!" said Kevin breathlessly.
"It would have taken twic as long on foot." replied Tom.
After they got their car fixed they started to drive home. When they were five minutes from home their car broke down again.
THE END
So beautiful for so many of the wrong reasons. And yes, the end is part of the story. There are three from my class included, and mine is the only one that said the end. I quite like the ending though. And the horses. i was never into horses, so what does it say about me that i thought of that rather than, say, someone gave them a lift? Of the two others, the first one ends with them walking for half an hour and finding a nice old man who lent them him car.
The second one goes like this:
They decided to hitch hike. They got picked up by a murderer. The murderer tried to murder them.
Luckily they'd been learning karate. They tied the murderer to his seat.
With their mobile they rung the cops. The cops told Tom and Kevin they had been looking for him for ten years. Tom and Kevin were HEROS.
Kids rock.
There is also a story by a year 5/6 boy, written from the point of view of a 19 year old whose father is dying and so he goes and joins the ANZACS. Either this kid had amazing empathy, or a really shitting homelife, but either way, it's weird when something written by someone so young can touch you like that.
Late one autumn night, Tom and Kevin were going to visit Club Bluff. On the way their car broke down. "Don't worry," said Tom, I'll use the mobile to ring the R.A.C.V." Unfortunately, the R.A.C.V. were too busy to help.
"Well, it doesn't look like were going to Club Bluff," said Kevin. They got their things out of the car and started walking down the highway at about midnight arrived at a hotel and decided to stay there that night.
The next day borrowed two horses from the stables next door. It took two hours to get to the hearest car yard. "We're here at last!" said Kevin breathlessly.
"It would have taken twic as long on foot." replied Tom.
After they got their car fixed they started to drive home. When they were five minutes from home their car broke down again.
THE END
So beautiful for so many of the wrong reasons. And yes, the end is part of the story. There are three from my class included, and mine is the only one that said the end. I quite like the ending though. And the horses. i was never into horses, so what does it say about me that i thought of that rather than, say, someone gave them a lift? Of the two others, the first one ends with them walking for half an hour and finding a nice old man who lent them him car.
The second one goes like this:
They decided to hitch hike. They got picked up by a murderer. The murderer tried to murder them.
Luckily they'd been learning karate. They tied the murderer to his seat.
With their mobile they rung the cops. The cops told Tom and Kevin they had been looking for him for ten years. Tom and Kevin were HEROS.
Kids rock.
There is also a story by a year 5/6 boy, written from the point of view of a 19 year old whose father is dying and so he goes and joins the ANZACS. Either this kid had amazing empathy, or a really shitting homelife, but either way, it's weird when something written by someone so young can touch you like that.