Writing Review?

[asicath]

So, I'm almost done with a single chapter of my loagaeth book, would anybody like review it for me? I feel that my writing technique could be vastly improved, so before I close the seal again, I'd like feedback on things like style, readability, flow, etc. I'd also like a sanity check, ie does it make sense can other people other than myself understand it? Or perhaps people might have suggestions on how to make it more accessible.

Any volunteers? I've already got some people in mind, some I've already talked to, but I'm just seeing if anybody else might be interested. You don't need any special qualifications, but a tolerance for gematria might actually let you get through the whole thing. I'd really appreciate any help I could get on this.