ジタバタ純情 - Chapter 10.5: Get out of the way

[asa_chan_love]

Title: ジタバタ純情 ("Struggling Pure Heart.") - Chapter 10.5: Get out of the way.
Pairings: TakaHasshi, TakaChii, Hasshinen
Fandom: Hey!Say! JUMP, Johnny's Junior
Genre: Angst, fluff
Rating: PG-15.
Warnings : Boy love?
Disclaimer: Buying JE at the moment Me no ownie.
Summary: Takaki isn't as dumb as he looks.

Comments

[sweetmilano90]

Hello! I'm a new reader of this fic. I just wanted to stop by and let you know that I'm now stalking your journal. XD Btw, why does Takaki hate Hasshi so much in the first place? Or are you getting to that later? ;)

[asa_chan_love]

Heeeeello new stalker! *gives you welcome flowers*

Uhm. Read the first chapters? They kind of had a bad break up and Hasshi kind of made out with Chinen to make Takaki jealous and it worked.

[sweetmilano90]

Of course I've read the previous chapters. ^^ But I still don't quite get why Takaki turned out to hate Hasshi in the first place. They have sex and then he leaves. But then again, it's getting pretty late over here and I'm not good at being observant when I'm tired. :P

[asa_chan_love]

Uhm. Takaki actually broke up with him after screwing him? A long lasting relationship crumbled to pieces so he could be with Chinen instead. So Hasshi hates him. Then, Takaki finds Hasshi making out with his chibi boyfriend and Takaki thinks he's trying to make him jealous/steal Chinen to hurt him. So Takaki hates him too.

Clearer or do I totally fail as a writer?

[sweetmilano90]

Let's see~. Takaki is in love with Chinen. Takaki sleeps with Hasshi because he's good in bed (XD ? lol, idk). Takaki doesn't like that Hasshi acts like a bitch sometimes so he finally dumps Hasshi. And then as you said, Hasshi ends up hating him etc. I guess what's unclear to me is what did Hasshi do that resulted in Takaki breaking up with him. *goes to check the prologue* I'm not happy with you and I don't feel the same way as before about this. So Hasshi must have done something that made Takaki unhappy? Was he bad in bed?

I don't know if I got it yet. Only you can tell. :) No you don't fail. I love this fic! *gives away a batch of cookies* :D

[asa_chan_love]

Okay... so, TakaHasshi were together, but Takaki fell in love with Chinen and realized that he wasn't really in love with Hasshi (he probably stayed with him because he's good in bed) and the week Takaki left Hasshi was the week he started dating Chinen (see chapter 3)

Hasshi basically didn't do anything bad, just that Takaki wasn't really in love with him and faked it the whole time. Because Hasshi is good in bed, or because he felt stuck with Hasshi, or because Chinen just pwns Takaki's soul really bad. Take your pick.

Okay, seriously. I think I'm going to make sure I make a chapter that explains the relationship a bit more.

[sweetmilano90]

Now I get it! Takaki, and not Hasshi, is simply being a bitch in this fic. *bricked* I hope I didn't annoy you too much with my babbling. ^^

[asa_chan_love]

Yeah, kind of. XD And if you got that, you shold have got that Chinen almost moaned Hasshi's name when in bed with Takaki and that gives Takaki extra reasons to be pissed.

No, you didn't annoy me. It just told me that I have to be more obvious about some things.