due South: Katabasis (Part I)

[ariafic]

Fandom: due South
Rating: R
Word count: 17,057
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski
Summary: "I talked to your dad, I went through this place called the Borderland, I had a boat ride, I fed a wolf a doughnut, and I told stories for your soul," Ray interrupted. "This does not mean you are not insane."

Katabasis

Comments

[soda_and_capes]

First of all, I've figured out why you're so good at writing RayK. It's because he actually talks kind of like you. I mean the idioms and things he uses, rather than actual speech patterns, but yeah. He says some of the same kinds of things you say, those things that are almost-but-not-quite Joss Whedon dialogue.

Fraser was just quiet. Maybe Ray should have asked.
Fraser being upset really upsets me. Thought you should know.

Ray figured Fraser was better because leaving the bullpen they were walking in step,
Oh, THIS. This. This is why I love people who are partners.

Fraser went sort of tense under Ray's arm, so Ray backed off.
AND ALSO THIS. Physical cues and being smart about each other and YES.

had smiled at Ray, and it was like he had a light switch to the goddamn sun.
Because LOVE. And also because Fraser.

read the beat-up romance novel he'd stolen off Frannie's desk for the hell of it.
THIS IS MY FAVORITE BIT SO FAR.

. . . You are too good at writing romance-novel prose.

"I am all over it if Fraser's doing some stupid thing, Dief."
YESSSSS.

Turnbull's face lit with a sudden idea. "I'll check!"
OH TURNBULL. *___*

"You didn't tell me this was one of those, like, trick wells you fall down again even if you don't mean to!"
♥!

Ray's mouth and Ray's brain and Ray's body all seemed to be running separately.
I feel that this is an accurate representation of panic. A++

leaned up and licked the whole side of Ray's face, and Ray kinda yelled at him.
I like how your write Ray's brain!

Ray saw her face stubborning up and had the weird idea he wanted to hug her
I LOVE THEM BOTH. They make a good team.

FRASER IS SO SUICIDAL, IT'S A LITTLE RIDIC. <33333333333

wtf are pumpkin pants, anyway?

so close to the back corner of Ray's brain that thought maybe Fraser plus Ray's bed equals greatness, but, God, not like this.
OH GOD, ARIA.

carded his fingers through Dief's ruff, and then leaned forward and hung on,
OH RAAAAAAAY

I actually love the idea of sick Fraser camping out at Ray's. Um, this is perhaps an indication that I should read your other new dS fic.

so he jammed it onto his head
ohgod yes

On the other side of the door, it was sure as hell not the inside of a closet.
FUCKING YES

"Well, the other Yank."
LOLOL

"Heading towards the white light, all that sort of silliness.
Ngh, oh FRASER.

I like fics with tea in. Especially useful and important tea.

"The Borderland is not kind," Fraser's dad said.
I am genuinely freaked out! Good job!

he really should make up his mind whether or not he wants to get shot.
THIS THIS THIS, HOLY SHIT

I am very fond of retellings and trips to the underworld.

At least Fraser'd taught him to swim.
Ahaha. This is an excellent sentiment.

and in each hollow in the snow there was a Ray's-foot-shaped patch of flowery grass.
:D :D :D I like when you do worldbuilding stuff!

AHAHA CHARON. Oh, you are cheap.

He looked a little like Ray's dad.
I love this.

"They don't want cops here," he said. "They want poets,"
UGH GOD YES

HE FED CERBERUS DOUGHTNUTS?? <33333333333

My only complaint about this fic is that I wish you hadn't spelled it all out with Ray remembering the mythology. Because I like subtle and sneaky shit.

and how the music thing was probably important for other stuff besides the dog.
I do like this line, though.

[ariastar]

Pumpkin pants = the ridiculous uniform pants with the puffy saddlebag things. I have no idea where I picked that particular word for them up.

I am glad I got the panic right, and a little worried myself that the romance novel prose is okay? AT LEAST IT TOOK ME LIKE FIVE MINUTES TO WRITE. Unlike writing Ray, which ... I think you may be right? I just sit down and write it conversational. (With Fraser POV I just sit down and break out all the long words I try not to use because they get annoying fast. Heh.)

Re: both the other fic and Fraser having taught Ray to swim, we seriously need to sit down and have a Mountie on the Bounty watching party. But that is two hours of your life, so, uh, I will make time for that episode basically whenever unless an essay is trying to kill me; if you have any free time it is well worth it.

Blame Ariel for not bitching me out for the unsubtlety, btw. I don't know, I just wanted to establish how much Ray knew about what he was doing? *shrug*

Mostly though DO YOUR EPIC FIC COMMENTARY RESPONSES FOREVER. <333