trekreversebang entrance "In My Memory"

Jun 24, 2010 21:45

Title: In my Memory

Artist: yuanhua

Raiting Art: PG

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challenge, trekversebang., fic, k/s

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shatfat July 2 2010, 09:02:44 UTC
Thanks Lt. for the problems to pass the message yourself

Your beta lied. That should read:

Thanks, Lieutenant, for taking the trouble to deliver the message personally

(or "in person")

Are you European? I'm just wondering because of the way you write. It feels like non-native English speaker--but not German, has to be some other language.

You need a native-speaking beta (America/Canada or Australia/NZ is best; Brits often don't realize how many Britishisms they're using and it makes Star Trek fanfic seem really ... off). Trust me, it's worth it.

Despite the language barrier I am enjoying your story. You do a nice job of setting the scene and there's a certain poetry to your writing.

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ariadnechan July 2 2010, 16:36:40 UTC
ohh thanks a lot for your comment i will ask for another beta!
in our defense we have a deadline just there. and i didn't notice i have more problems.
Because like you said, I'm Spanish and i studied Brit's english,

thanks for your comment and for liking the story anyway!
:)

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