Lightning Strikes Twice - Part 51A

[ariaadagio]

Title: Lightning Strikes Twice
Fandom: Grey's Anatomy
Pairing: Duh. (Mer/Der)
Rating: M
Timeline: Post Time After Time.

I nearly broke my brain trying to get this part written.  Please feedback if you have the time :)

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The water spread out like a gray, glass sheet.  Slivers of broken, white surf exploded in a spray of froth and foam, only to

Comments

[greymcdreamysgh]

I was so excited to see this posted today! I know you were having a little bit of trouble, but I really enjoyed this part and I think you did a great job with it

[ariaadagio]

Thank you :) I hated going back to the angst after promising they'd be happy, but it had to be done, and I got to do a lot of fun stuff like the commuting!

HBR checking in...

[anonymous]

Oh Gawd. You have no idea how much it made my day seeing that you updated. Seriously.

This was so friggin' good it's ridiculous. The popcorn bit was just wow, to quote yourself, so full of win. The commuting on the ferry made me melt and Derek's locker room uncertainty made me want to cry. But Bailey in the clinic. Oh my. That was just on a whole other level of awesomeness I have no words.

Bailey being snarky with him as she watched him cower in the doorway was just awesome and was so fitting and was so what he needed. He didn't need warm fuzzies then, he needed to be treated like a doctor and trust her to get it right with him yet again. I loved Mark showing up to be there for him. That was awesome, but was even more awesome was that it didn't go the way Mark planned and was more than a bit angsty. That was so realistic it was fabulous. Loved the flashbacks to their childhood too. They were just great. Why oh why can't Shonda write stuff this good?

Off to gleefully read part 2 now

Re: HBR checking in...

[ariaadagio]

Thank you :) Mark definitely nosed his way into the scenario. I adored writing him being all ready-to-go on the friendship front and having Derek still balking a lot. It shows that they can't really just... go back. No matter how much they've cleared the air.

[mrsfjl66]

oh the happiness! So glad you posted today. I needed it. I posted once before mentioning I was an LST fangirl lurker but I am de-lurking. Derek's not okayness is palpable in this, but I'm okay with that. That's part of what makes the story so great. It's real. Derek is not bleeding in the brain one moment and performing 8 hr surgeries the next. You've made his brain's confusion (and his frustration about it) very concrete.

And the balance to that is Meredith. They are a couple commuting to work and helping eachother heal in the process. Perfect;) Why can't we see this on the show??? (this is a rather constant refrain in my head so ignore it if you like;))

[ariaadagio]

Thank you :) I'm glad to hear from you! It was very important to me to portray recovery from such a severe illness in the most realistic fashion I could manage. The point I wanted to make with this part was that Derek is way better than he was, but still healing. Contrary to before, though, he actually runs to Meredith without being prodded, which I loved. This part was exhausting for me to write, but I think, in the end, definitely worth it.

[ariaadagio]

Thank you :) Despite the angst, that's really what this part was about for me. Showing just how far they've grown.

[moonwalker47]

Great post! I was admittedly a little confused with the Derek/Mark conversation at the end. However, I blame myself and not your wonderful writing for that. Off to read the second part!

[ariaadagio]

Thank you! What confused you about it? Mostly it was meant to show that, though Mark is a bit over-eager, he's there and trying to be a friend again.