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ariaadagio

Lightning Strikes Twice - Part 46A

Sep 26, 2007 00:44

Title: Lightning Strikes Twice
Fandom: Grey's Anatomy
Pairing: Duh. (Mer/Der)
Rating: M
Timeline: Post Time After Time.

Thanks for the comments everyone. I'm behind again, and I'm super busy right now, but I will get to your feedback on the previous part as soon as I can. Hope you enjoy!

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Comments 13

greymcdreamysgh September 26 2007, 06:00:50 UTC

It's super-late and I should totally be in bed but I had to leave a comment. Your one-liners in this chapter were particularly spectacular, including but not limited to:

Derek chuckled. “Glad you didn’t kill me?”
and
“You’re going home in like two minutes. The sex can wait.”

YAY! Derek's going home! But also big yay to Cristina standing up to Burke! I hate Burke and the whole wedding idea was a disaster. I hated how much Cristina had to sacrifice of herself to make him happy or make him feel like a man. Great job.

ariaadagio October 4 2007, 20:01:47 UTC

Thank you so much :) I love it when I can interject little bits of humor like that. It's a way to break up an otherwise tense, unhappy part.

I'm so glad I was able to try my hand at fixing Burke and Cristina in this story. I thought they were an interesting couple, though, I will admit, they often seemed more like they were participating in a tug-of-war game than an exercise in intimacy. I, too, hated how much Burke was taking without giving.

lareina95 September 26 2007, 12:47:55 UTC

God, that was awesome!!! The conversation between Derek and Dr. Weller was great; I can imagine operating on your boss involves quite the amount of pressure!! And Cristina and Burke - gosh, if they'd had that conversation on the show, they might actually have gotten married. Wow - I can't believe I just called that a conversation; sorry! That was most definitely A Fight. But I loved Cristina insisting on September, because she likes it. That was so cool. And Mere realizing the huge wedding ocean she's in was so funny; I could see the look on her face! I'm sorry work is dragging you down right now; I hope it gets better soon!

ariaadagio October 4 2007, 20:06:49 UTC

Thank you so much :)

I really enjoyed letting Derek have a moment to thank Dr. Weller. It showed that, even under his unhappiness over the situation, Derek realized that he had not only put his co-worker in an extremely stressful position, he was also aware that his life had been saved. I always made a point of showing, in this story, that, while Derek was miserable about it, he never was a 'bad patient'. He always did what was asked of him, always behaved and didn't complain openly to the staff. That was my way to show he was aware of and thankful for what was being done for him, even if he didn't like it in concept. But the thanks to Dr. Weller was the first time I had a chance to let him verbalize it. It was a small, itsy bitsy thing in the overall chapter, but really, I think, one of the most important.

amen! poroto September 26 2007, 17:30:41 UTC

It seemed sort of like trying to cram the Iliad into a haiku.

:oD

love women like this.

Re: amen! ariaadagio October 4 2007, 20:07:03 UTC

Thank you :) That was one of my favorite lines to write!

oatmeal_cookie September 26 2007, 18:39:26 UTC

His vows would probably make her melt. He was a cheesy romantic. He’d do the cheesy, romantic vows thing. What would she write?

She didn’t know. She couldn’t even explain her favorite color without a paragraph of babble. Explaining whatever this was that she had with Derek? It seemed sort of like trying to cram the Iliad into a haiku.Heh. So, so true. I just love your interpretation of Meredith's inner monologue, it's so rambly and endearing, and it just rings so true to her character. She's incredibly funny, and I love the way she thinks of Derek, how much she really loves and knows him ( ... )

ariaadagio October 4 2007, 20:13:58 UTC

Thank you so much :) I know I've said this many times before, but Meredith is just a blast for me to write, not only because I can relate to the rambly thing so well, but because she really does let my sense of humor through the cracks in ways that Derek's POV often doesn't.

Dr. Weller is sweety, isn't he? I wish I had some time to actually give him a bit more substance. All we seem to know about him at this point is that he's egoless, likes to use words like super, and is an awesome surgeon in his own right.

dermerfan September 26 2007, 19:31:31 UTC

Wow. So many emotions in this part...Tense at the begining with the doctor, Ellen, Derek, and Mer. Then comfortable and light with Der and Mer having a few minutes to themselves, right back to tense when Christina and Burke charged in and in the midst of that was a swoon worthy glimpse of Mer and Der's wedding...All PERFECTLY put together!

I loved how you brought Christina and Burke into this part. That was great!

I think Derek's emotions are a bit everywhere right now...Excited about going home, frustuarted at not being able to do a lot, and anxious about what might happen once he'd not constantly being watched. It'll be very interesting to see what takes place at home.

Off to the next part....GREAT job! :)

ariaadagio October 4 2007, 20:15:26 UTC

Thank you so much :) My goal with this part was to go all over the emotional map. Going home is a hopeful thing, but it isn't just that, and it certainly isn't only happy, either.

Glad you liked Burketina :) I don't think I'd ever write a fic just for them, but I did find their relationship really interesting until the writers started ruining it with Burke's constant, unfair demands.