I'm not sure how I feel about this chapter. Don't get me wrong, your writing is as good as usual, but I'm kind of annoyed by Jared's behavior.
First, with making Jensen ride his bike to the rally. I know he meant well, but I think he pushed too far. But then, I guess it's just who he his!
What made me really frown actually was that he showed his brand new tattoo to Lang. I get that he's jealous and that he wants to make sure that Lang understand where his place is but it looks like he only got the tattoo for this... I'm sure he didn't, because it's obvious he loves Jensen, but that's how I felt reading this scene.
But then, I LOVED the scene with Alan at the bike rally, and the fact that you made a lot of charcters interact with each other. And I'm really, really pleased by Phin's reaction. I hope you're not making us like him before actually make him do stupid things with Jared cause that would be cruel xD
I hope you won't be offended by my comment and by the lenght of it, and I just want to say that I'm still a huge fan of you! <3
Well, I'm glad you liked the writing. I'm kind of sad that you didn't like it otherwise, but I guess we can't bat a thousand ALL the time, right? ;)
I think you're right -- Jared WAS jealous. But I DO have to say, I think it was pretty grown-up, how he dealt with this, considering he just used to beat people up all the time. LOL But that's my views on it! And he definitely didn't get the tattoo for that reason! He loves Jen more than he can say, I think, and does things like that to prove it. Know what I mean?
LOL I think Phin's a good guy at heart. He just takes some getting used to. ;)
I'm not offended at all, darling. I'm glad you read it!
Yeah, Jared's way of dealing with it was great and definitely grown-up, but I would have like it better if he hadn't shown his tattoo. Yeah, I know, I must be the only one getting all worked up from such tiny and insignificant details xD
I wouldn't worry about it, darling. Just 'cuz others liked it, doesn't mean you HAVE to.
I think that he flashed it, really, only to silently tell Lang who he was, rather than saying, "I'm the bf of the dude you were snogging in your office the other day!" ;) (I think that was his way of being suuuuubtle. Jared has yet to learn the FINE art of doing that!)
But yes, there's nothing saying you MUST AGREE OMG! So dooon't worry about it!
I'm glad you take it like this because the last time I made a comment like this, the writer took it bad without even reading it until the end and banned me from his journal v_v
The characters DO become your babies, and you DO become protective of them, but if you're going to be a writer, you have to know that not EVERYONE is going to like what you've done, y'know?? But, I would NEVER ban anyone for that. I mean, unless they came up in here and were like, 'Dude, your story sucks and you do too!' then maybe, yeah. (I'd probably more be like, "Well, who's the dumbass that read it though?" LOL)
I'm perfectly fiiiine with people speaking their minds. I DO, however, notice that tact seems to be a fine art these days. There are ways to NICELY tell people about what you didn't like (which you did just fine!). But some people...SHEESH! Because there's also tact when taking concrit! Some people cannot STAND opposition! But if we all thought alike...how boring would that be?
OMG SHUTTING UP NOW. LOL I can talk forever on this subject. But yes, hopefully, in the next chapter, Jared will redeem himself for you!!
First, with making Jensen ride his bike to the rally. I know he meant well, but I think he pushed too far. But then, I guess it's just who he his!
What made me really frown actually was that he showed his brand new tattoo to Lang. I get that he's jealous and that he wants to make sure that Lang understand where his place is but it looks like he only got the tattoo for this... I'm sure he didn't, because it's obvious he loves Jensen, but that's how I felt reading this scene.
But then, I LOVED the scene with Alan at the bike rally, and the fact that you made a lot of charcters interact with each other. And I'm really, really pleased by Phin's reaction. I hope you're not making us like him before actually make him do stupid things with Jared cause that would be cruel xD
I hope you won't be offended by my comment and by the lenght of it, and I just want to say that I'm still a huge fan of you! <3
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I think you're right -- Jared WAS jealous. But I DO have to say, I think it was pretty grown-up, how he dealt with this, considering he just used to beat people up all the time. LOL But that's my views on it! And he definitely didn't get the tattoo for that reason! He loves Jen more than he can say, I think, and does things like that to prove it. Know what I mean?
LOL I think Phin's a good guy at heart. He just takes some getting used to. ;)
I'm not offended at all, darling. I'm glad you read it!
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I think that he flashed it, really, only to silently tell Lang who he was, rather than saying, "I'm the bf of the dude you were snogging in your office the other day!" ;) (I think that was his way of being suuuuubtle. Jared has yet to learn the FINE art of doing that!)
But yes, there's nothing saying you MUST AGREE OMG! So dooon't worry about it!
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I'm perfectly fiiiine with people speaking their minds. I DO, however, notice that tact seems to be a fine art these days. There are ways to NICELY tell people about what you didn't like (which you did just fine!). But some people...SHEESH! Because there's also tact when taking concrit! Some people cannot STAND opposition! But if we all thought alike...how boring would that be?
OMG SHUTTING UP NOW. LOL I can talk forever on this subject. But yes, hopefully, in the next chapter, Jared will redeem himself for you!!
*squishes*
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I always try to be tactful because being mean and cruel is pointless and stupid, and it's not what I'm aiming for when I leave review.
Aaaaaand I'm shutting up too, or I'll talk and talk like... forever.
*hugs*
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