(Upload) Superman Returns Redux Challenge ch. 2

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This. Needs. A. Shorter. Name.

It took me a while to smooth the kinks I had in continuity to write this story. Not that you can tell because nothing happens in this chapter, but I needed to know what was I working with. It's also a much longer story than I'm used to writing, so I'm getting a hang of the pacing. I have plotted out at least another

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Not an angst queen! Did you see how quick they made up? Clark can't stay mad for long. I'm glad you enjoyed it :) It took me forever, I accept that, but hopefully it won't take me forever next time...

Thanks for the correction :)

[tmelange]

Mina! You already know that I lovelovelovelovelove this! I think the subtle changes you made to the confrontation at the end work very well. I also think you should now come up with an official title for this story. Calling it the "Superman Returns Redux Challenge" doesn't do such a fantastic story justice.

I'm very, very inteested to see how you develop the slash in this story. Bruce has become Clark's anchor. Without Bruce, Clark would have been really adrift upon his return to Earth. You've done a remarkable job expanding on a role that I've seen Batman take with Superman time and time again in the comics -- that of protector. Bravo on all the little nuiances in this chapter, and the length and the wonderful emotions threaded throughout. Can't wait for the next part. :)

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Thanks T! Your help was/is invaluable :) I wouldn't be attempting such a long story if it wasn't for your encouragement!

I was editing today and I didn't know how to fix Clark's tantrum. I'm glad you think they work better even if they aren't much. I need a title!! I can't think of anything good, though..

Bruce as 'blessed protector' is something I really like. Clark doesn't really need to be protected, yet Bruce finds a way to do it anyway. I have no idea how the slash is going to find its way here, because the outline I have... Bruce is sucking in the romance department. I just can't make him get his head on the game. Clark, otoh, is cooperating just well. Silly Bruce muse. Thanks for all the help and I'm very, very happy you enjoyed it! onto the next one!

[schala_kid]

First of all I must say this fic is wonderful and one of my favorite things is the portrayal of Bruce and how he feels towards Clark.

"Love hadn’t kept Clark on Earth the first time...If love and duty hadn’t kept Clark here, if family and friends hadn’t been enough…"

Poor Bruce his greatest fear is that Clark will leave again and he doesn't want it to happen, but his insecurities tell him he will so he doesn't want to get too attached.

The oppressive atmosphere of the Fortress -cold and dark like a tomb, a mausoleum for the last son of Krypton- was getting to be too much

I love how you keep reffering to the Fortress as Clark's masoleum, he truly lost a great deal of his heritage and if it wasn't for Bruce or JJ he would have probably just died then and there, which made me a little mad when he snapped at Bruce.

Kevlar clad arm rose from under the black cape and wrapped itself around Clark’s shoulders. Clark leaned into the half embrace, and couldn’t fight the knot in his throat anymore. His breath hitched. “I want to come back,”

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*Grins* I'm very glad you like the fic, and especially Bruce! This Bruce does have a lot of insecurities about Clark because he feels betrayed and well, if Clark left once, he could leave again. Bruce has a canon fear of attachement because people he loves tends to die, so his fears are just redoubled with Clark.

which made me a little mad when he snapped at Bruce.

Eep! I was trying to make Clark angry, and when one is angry and hurting, one just lashes to whoever is near. Clark wasn't trying to be mean to Bruce, he just felt betrayed by humanity. I hope you weren't too mad at him :P I'm glad you liked the ending, though, I was afraid it might be too mushy, but then, those two just rode a rollercoaster :P thanks for commenting!

[schala_kid]

Well I wasn't really mad but more of a little peeved but if it is of any consolation I was also sad for Clark and I do kind of sympathize with him, I hate when people take my stuff while I am away.

[arch_schatten]

*dances around* Yay! I aim to please :) I am extremly glad you liked this chapter. Coming from a writer look up to, I feel all tingly inside :)

Given how much was wrong with that movie, I fail to see this as a bad thing.

I am going to bring Lex Luthor Man of Steel into continuity... that's just kind of wrong

Clark and Bruce fool themselves into thinking that Clark's not an event by himself. Just.. how could you look away? It's freaking Superman. But Bruce is king of denial, so he'll try.

Clark *will* be an awesome Dad. Because anything else doesn't fit his nature at all, just.. bah! shame on you, canon.

hotter than the very best porn I have ever written.

Now, now, you write *delicious* porn. I am very fond of that image, though. Bruce has a fixation on the red cape, it's all I can say. But I still prefer your good, good porn :) I am really happy you like Bruce! keeping him inside range has been hard, he shifts all the time *rolls eyes* he doesn't want to cave into the porn! what's wrong with him?

it wasn't petty of them to

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Lol, ahh, that kind of makes more sense indeed. Your new rule is a great rule, I should steal it... god knows I leave the weirdest of feedback when I'm out of sorts...

Clark is such a woobie. I'm glad Bruce is not being sucky and Clark can lean on him... because when Bruce sucks, he sucks big time.

[godiloveslash]

AWWW! Poor Clark, good thing Bruce is there to provide some cuddles. Nicely done and I can't wait for more.

[arch_schatten]

Thanks! I'm on my way to continuing this. And Bruce is very stable here, so of course he's there for Clark to offer the cuddles. He's not freezing his ass here, of course not :P