Fic: How To Make a Better Vampire 1/? (TVD)

[arabian]

Title: How To Make A Better Vampire
Chapter: 01 - Not Yet [Featured Characters: Elena, Damon, Stefan, Jeremy, Matt and Meredith]
Author: JenniferH (Arabian)
Rating: M (For future chapters/language, sex, violence)
Summary: Post 3.22 -- Elena grapples with who she is as a vampire, struggling for control as she tries to find herself and accept who

Comments

[sumeria]

I am really liking your take on this so far! Especially the degree to which Jeremy is factoring into Elena's decision, because you're totally right. She absolutely cannot just die on him if she has a choice, that would be the most selfish thing in the world.

I'm also super digging the dynamic between her and the brothers, where Damon is the one who is actually her emotional support and Stefan is the one she *wants* to want for emotional support. It captures where they are on the show now very well, in my opinion.

Awesome beginning, and really looking forward to more!

[arabian]

Especially the degree to which Jeremy is factoring into Elena's decision, because you're totally right. She absolutely cannot just die on him if she has a choice, that would be the most selfish thing in the world.

I'll be really, really surprised if Jeremy is not the deciding reason for her choosing to turn. I can't see how it won't be, you know?

Stefan is the one she *wants* to want

That's a theme I'll be exploring because while I don't doubt that Elena loves Stefan, it really does feel like she chooses to be with him because she, well, chooses to do so. She wants to be there because she's convinced herself it's right, and being with Damon is not. It's all a big, mixed up crazy that, yeah, I'll be exploring.

The goal is to post a chapter every two weeks. Hopefully I can stay on that target. :)

[badboy_fangirl]

So, first of all, YAY. Second of all, you did what I have not had the patience to do, write a long, detailed version of the actual transition. I love all of it, and I'm glad you were willing to do it. I just want to gloss over all of it and move on to the problems when I write, but when I read, this is what I want.

Particular points of delight:
but attempted murder and a general air of douchbaggery pretty much signaled a relationship's end
LOL. Oh, yes, that's a mood killer, Elena.

I like that despite Stefan doing what Elena wanted him too, she does feel anger that he did it. That is just so REAL. Especially considering his choice means she has to make this terrible choice, and she feels like she HAS to because of Jeremy. Oy. Also, choosing Stefan = Death; choosing Damon would have meant life. SO SAD. *weeps*

Damon + Meredith friendshippy feels. I just love the beginning of it here.

Also, 10 points to Gryffindor for Matt being on Team Damon :D

He hesitated for a moment, and then met Damon's gaze. After a silent exchange between

[arabian]

So, first of all, YAY. Second of all, you did what I have not had the patience to do, write a long, detailed version of the actual transition. I love all of it, and I'm glad you were willing to do it. I just want to gloss over all of it and move on to the problems when I write, but when I read, this is what I want.

Wow, my bigger issue is getting to the problem, hee! I love the set-up, plot can be such a drag sometime. Hahaha. Seriously, I'm glad you're enjoying it. This has been a lot of fun to work on. Hopefully, I can keep it going. :) I hope so, because I've already invested a lot in this bad boy. I tell you, though, shipperjunkie is right, this thing is becoming a monster. I'm at over 22,000 words in just the first four chapters! EEK!

Particular points of delight:

Aww.

I like that despite Stefan doing what Elena wanted him too, she does feel anger that he did it. That is just so REAL. Right, I wanted her to be angry, but I also wanted her to not express that anger because that's in character for her in my opinion. I kinda felt

[arabian]

AHHHHHH I feel too dazzled to go search for a gif, but something like “MY EMOTIONS!!!” would definitely be in order here ♥_____♥

I prefer words to gifs, so yay! Thank you.

That was amazing! What a riveting first chapter.

Thank you. I wanted to draw people in even though the "good stuff" isn't here yet, lol!

I love the melody of these words. I love how the overwhelming meaning of them collides with their heart-wrenching simplicity. & I just love the “not yet” leitmotiv of this chapter. It's perfect.

Thank you, and yup, that would be why I titled the chapter "Not Yet." It felt right to go with that while re-reading it through.

I love how the story starts with Jeremy inviting Elena in. Into their house, their home. It's both beautiful & heartwarming, but at the same time so utterly tragic.

Aww, what a lovely way of putting that. Exactly what I was trying to convey.

”She remembered in that moment that he was supposed to be dead, she had said goodbye to him, broken his heart for the last time.” - I loved this sentence, the last

[bogwitch]

An intriguing start.

[arabian]

Thank you. :)

[shipperjunkie]

So amazing. So thrilled you've begun posting this monster. Your writing is awesome. :)

[arabian]

I know. Now I'm anxious to start posting the good stuff, LOL, but I want to try to keep to the 2-week schedule. We'll see. I'm doing pretty good on getting started on chapter 5. Fingers crossed that one will be done Saturday morning. :)

Thank you. :D

[shipperjunkie]

Looking for to it! I'll nitpick it more than I did the last few chapters (which honestly didn't need it), I got swamped by life, made a mood theme and wrote a fic (so now I feel like I'm a real member of the fandom, I'm a big girl now LOL)

You should be so proud of yourself for this fic. :)

[arabian]

I will go back and read your fic later, right now I just don't want to read anything else. I'm trying to concentrate on just getting a good handle on this one and keeping it going.

I appreciate what you can offer, so thank you so much. It's been a big help. :)