500 word SOP for Sociology Ph.D

Nov 09, 2009 16:45


Hey guys, I realize it's application season and the community is swamped with SOPs, so thanks in advance for your patience and helpful input (and sorry I never had anything to say, I'm just too inexperienced to have anything helpful to offer).

I posted a very erroneous version of a SOP a while back. This is a version of my SOP for a school ( Read more... )

sociology, sop, phd

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juicy_eli November 9 2009, 16:31:32 UTC
I'm not too fond on the first couple of sentences, especially the first one. Moving to America at age nine was the first time I was exposed to the extent people differs from one place to the next. Isn't it: to the extent that people differ? Secondly, you try to make it personal, but at the same time, I feel like I'm reading a textbook. Also, in my opinion, I feel that the second sentence, if you must you it (I'm not too sure yet), should be moved somewhere else in the essay. Maybe in the fifth paragraph ( ... )

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hydy November 9 2009, 16:34:37 UTC
thanks for the quick reply and suggestions!

I'm kind of embarrassed to be an English major with horrid grammar...

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juicy_eli November 9 2009, 16:38:05 UTC
No worries! I understand, somewhat. I was born in the US but my entire family with the exceptions of my cousins and I are immigrants. My teachers in high school, with the exceptions of some, were all from other countries. I recently just spent a year abroad and lost more of my English XD

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circumfession November 14 2009, 01:52:04 UTC
half the English Ph.D students that I know of have horrid grammar. As I keep repeating to myself (the lady doth protest too much?), we study the literature, not the language :P

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hydy November 14 2009, 02:05:10 UTC
You have just given me a brilliant new excuse to make to friends :D

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