I love your sub!Warren, and your Tucker is one scary man. I love the way you interspersed the conversation about robots within the narrative.
Like a giant spider, Tucker crawled over Warren's body. He seemed to be saying something, softly, under his breath: his lips moved and air passed out in different rhythms. Black eyes skated impassively over exposed skin, and he inched closer, until he was gazing down directly into Warren's face.
I love that entire paragraph.
Warren/Tucker is a very hot intellectually stimulating pairing and you write it so well. Erm...yeah, so I think you can say that I liked this.
Yes, you can. And it was very thoughtful feedback, too! Thank you for taking the time to do that.
It's like there's this whole context around it that I can just feel, even though it's only ever implied and assumed.
That's one of the best compliments I've ever received. :D It really pleases me that you picked up on the stuff between the lines. I've always wondered if that gets through to the reader, or if it's just something I can see because I know what I was thinking while writing. If that makes sense. *g*
Ooh, fantastic! Tucker's so genuinely creepy, I love it! It was great with just the main action but the conversation about robots seems to give it more meaning and round it out so well. :)
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Like a giant spider, Tucker crawled over Warren's body. He seemed to be saying something, softly, under his breath: his lips moved and air passed out in different rhythms. Black eyes skated impassively over exposed skin, and he inched closer, until he was gazing down directly into Warren's face.
I love that entire paragraph.
Warren/Tucker is a very hot intellectually stimulating pairing and you write it so well. Erm...yeah, so I think you can say that I liked this.
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It's like there's this whole context around it that I can just feel, even though it's only ever implied and assumed.
That's one of the best compliments I've ever received. :D It really pleases me that you picked up on the stuff between the lines. I've always wondered if that gets through to the reader, or if it's just something I can see because I know what I was thinking while writing. If that makes sense. *g*
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I loved this bit:
Some day, Tucker may pull the leash and hold it taut, just to watch Warren struggle to breathe.
The thought excited Warren terribly.
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I absolutely adore Warren/Tucker, and yours is particularly amazing.
I love Warren tied up interspersed with Tucker's opinions on robots. Plus the angst. Oh, the angst. Mmm... :-)
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Thank you for the nice feedback!
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It was great with just the main action but the conversation about robots seems to give it more meaning and round it out so well. :)
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