Can you review and spork my story?

[ssbob90]

Is it ok if I post my story (to which I want to publish once completed) for review/sporking

https://www.wattpad.com/story/154904336-arkalion-of-iron-and-mystic-obscura

Any critism and praise are welcome (if I can't post it here please direct me to a proper posting group and I will delete this entry).

Edit: there is a twist(I think) at chapter 13 that might make it a bit more original what are your opinions on it(once you reach that chapter).