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Sep 21, 2007 00:30

A SEASON OF BLACK CHRYSANTHEMUMS: WINTER
by corbeaun

[kudo norio] A Season of Black Chrysanthemums: Winter, part 4 )

sub: corbeaun, round 004

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uminohikari October 7 2007, 20:30:24 UTC
Her confession was still a bit of a shock.
Oh, Hikaru, you're so oblivious ♥

The added burden of a girlfriend he didn't need.
Shouldn't it be "He didn't need the added burden of a girlfriend?" It seems a bit awkward...

Touya Akira was equal to the burden of at least three different girlfriends.
SO TRUE.

Hikaru noticed that he was wearing that funny, bee-striped tie.
*snicker*. you'd think Akira would have gotten a better fashion sense by now.

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uminohikari October 7 2007, 23:17:15 UTC
*pets Hikaru* Why yes, yes he is.

Putting the object at the front of the sentence gives "the added burden of a girlfriend" the emphasis I want. Possibly, it's also a personal stylistic affliction. :P

I really enjoyed typing that sentence about Touya. *g*

I don't think anyone in the HnG fandom ever gets tired of making fun of Akira's fashion sense. Coincidentally, though, I think that bee-striped tie absolutely adorable. And secretly, Hikaru does too. ;)

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