[ryouken]

May 04, 2007 13:51

STANDING ON THE EDGE OF TOMORROW
by doumeki

[ryouken] Standing on the Edge of Tomorrow, part 2 )

sub: stillskies, round 003

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anonymous May 5 2007, 07:11:41 UTC
I still really like this a lot. The pairing is awesome, their families are love, and the progression is gradual and sweet and... you know, Ashiwara is just sad and Saeki is an idiot, but. Still.

Love! So there! You do not suck!

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anonymous May 5 2007, 09:01:42 UTC
I really enjoyed this fic. Ogata, and the yuppie-pros. The Ashiwara/Saeki game made me wince with sympathy. Poor Ogata seems to be a general target for those who want to cast someone in the role of one who's loved and lost. (Again I note the references to Prince of Tennis and TezuFuji!)

- fuuchou

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maudite_a_deux May 5 2007, 18:38:48 UTC
Wonderful! The pacing was just right, and you didn't even make Ogata act like a jerk in the end -- I liked it a lot.

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anonymous May 5 2007, 20:03:08 UTC
Really interesting - I like this characterization of Ashiwara and Saeki.

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she_universe May 6 2007, 02:58:15 UTC
Oh, parts of this are so right on the nail with Ashiwara pining and Saeki keeping him, if not totally out of range, enough so and it's just...

yeah, okay, nothing really constructively coherent to add. The end bit left me wanting a bit of a stronger push of a closing, but i really did like this quite a bit, especially all the PoT stuff (!!!) and how Ashiwara really does never mind anything and that struck me as really awfully sad.

By the way, characterizations? Spot on. They're minor characters so you'd figure that anything would be right but it isn't true and Ogata, god, you even got Ogata. There was just so much glee here.

and if i'm right (and i'm so sure i am), this was way too easy of a guess.

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