I'm with Patra in that I found this hard to follow in places. If I'm trying to figure out who's speaking, I'm not paying proper attention to the fic. That being said, I can see Ochi being OCD, but having a nervous breakdown and quitting competing because of losing to Akira and Hikaru? I don't know, I just don't see it. This is the same guy that demanded to play Yashiro, knowing full well that he could lose, to properly earn his spot on the Japanese team. I kind of feel like this is a different Ochi, here.
Well, as to the format: I tried this out on a few people before I upped it. They were neither familiar with Hikaru no Go but both could follow the conversation just fine.
As to Ochi's characterization: 1. It's his mom that's talking here, not Ochi, we don't get to hear Ochi's plans at all here. For all we know he could be wrapping up his breakfast and breaking his childhood piggy bank to buy a ticket back to Tokyo and sneaking out of the house as this phone conversation is happening! 2. This is a fan fic. My explanation of the character can differ from yours. There are many established fanon (=things accepted in fandom as universal true, but that has not been established in the original canon) assumptions out there, some of which I disagree with. You don't see me attacking those do you?
1. Point taken. 2. I was NOT attacking the fic, I was simply saying why this didn't work for me. Not every fic is for everyone, it's that simple. That doesn't necessarily mean anything about either the fic or the reader. You are entitled to your characterization and I'm entitled to my opinion about it, that's all.
Yes, you are entitled to your opinion. (And I did not perceive your comment as an attack.)
But I put a lot of hard work in this, and maybe you can imagine how I feel when I get a review that is basically nothing but negativity: you didn't like the format, and you didn't like the characterization.
My mother taught me that if you can't say anything nice (in public), don't say anything at all (in public). In private is a whole other matter of course. And anyone is perfectly welcome to discuss any of the choices I've made in my fics with me in PMs or chat. You can utterly demolish them there if it so pleases you, and I may even help you do it.
But in public, as a common courtesy, as one writer to another, I do expect enough respect from you for my effort in the form of a comment on at least one thing you liked in it. And if you really couldn't find anything you liked, I expect you to have enough respect to NOT place a comment at all.
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Bregalnica
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- Patra
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Ngounie
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As to Ochi's characterization:
1. It's his mom that's talking here, not Ochi, we don't get to hear Ochi's plans at all here. For all we know he could be wrapping up his breakfast and breaking his childhood piggy bank to buy a ticket back to Tokyo and sneaking out of the house as this phone conversation is happening!
2. This is a fan fic. My explanation of the character can differ from yours. There are many established fanon (=things accepted in fandom as universal true, but that has not been established in the original canon) assumptions out there, some of which I disagree with. You don't see me attacking those do you?
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2. I was NOT attacking the fic, I was simply saying why this didn't work for me. Not every fic is for everyone, it's that simple. That doesn't necessarily mean anything about either the fic or the reader. You are entitled to your characterization and I'm entitled to my opinion about it, that's all.
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But I put a lot of hard work in this, and maybe you can imagine how I feel when I get a review that is basically nothing but negativity: you didn't like the format, and you didn't like the characterization.
My mother taught me that if you can't say anything nice (in public), don't say anything at all (in public).
In private is a whole other matter of course. And anyone is perfectly welcome to discuss any of the choices I've made in my fics with me in PMs or chat. You can utterly demolish them there if it so pleases you, and I may even help you do it.
But in public, as a common courtesy, as one writer to another, I do expect enough respect from you for my effort in the form of a comment on at least one thing you liked in it. And if you really couldn't find anything you liked, I expect you to have enough respect to NOT place a comment at all.
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