villanelle

[ansat]

Don't believe the hype. It is not easy to write a villanelle. At least, not if you basically gave up rhyme long ago. I think I got one, though. This is, of course, a draft. I haven't settled on punctuation or polishing. The words seem pretty settled, though.

i dont know why she would not see
the impact of the words she said
the damage it would cause to me

wed started out so hopefully
id hoped to share more than a bed
i don't know why she would not see

where once was one there now were three
a vow broken a burden shed
what damage it would cause to me

to find id lost my family
for that was where her choices led
i don't know why she would not see

we could have shared when finally
but she had gone too far ahead
the damage would just come to me

not looking back she walked off free
and left me in a dream now dead
i dont know why she would not see
the damage it would cause to me

I need new material. And to know how much one can abuse the refrain lines without breaking the form.