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☃ ❄ END OF YEAR FEEDBACK MEME ❄ ☃
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[colorfunk]

colorfunk / masterlist

[colorfunk]

oh god i am absolutely in love with your writing! cathedral city has to be one of my all-time favorite krishan fics, everything about it was just so lovely and perfect. this town ain't big enough and i was living in a devil town are also among my favorites. you do characterization, action, and flow just so well in my opinion, and you deserve a lot more recognition!

p.s. the fact that layhan pacrim au is incomplete saddens my heart :(

[colorfunk]

wow thank you for this cmnt, it's super kind of you ;~;

p.s. SOB 2/3 is coming i swear i'm so sorry pls bear with me ;~;

[colorfunk]

your fic is all excellent and you are very talented, but i think your style can get repetitive at times especially in your longer fic.

[syupeojunieo]

syupeojunieo (๑•́ ω •̀๑)

[syupeojunieo]

I love how your fics and short and simple and sweet ^^ would love to see you tackle more AUs/longfics though!

[seulpeo]

seulpeo | galaxyabandoned | masterlist

[anonymous]

i read your fic even if i don't know who the people are, i am that in love with your writing

[anonymous]

i think you need to work on connecting what you envision to what is on the page, because sometimes i feel like as a reader i'm missing something that you could explain to me.

[darkyulate]

darkyulate / wheredreamslast / masterlist

[darkyulate]

i think all in all your writing is good, but you need to find a balance between showing and telling.

[darkyulate]

Hi anon! I hope you don't mind when I ask, but what do you mean exactly? And do you maybe have an idea how I could do that :) Thanks so much! :)

[darkyulate]

here's an example:

"Baekhyun is rummaging through the things in the attic of the Kim Household when she spots an old treasure chest in the corner of the room."

while the picture you've painted in your reader's mind is clear and crisp, it sounds a bit rigid. each sentence has to advance the plot AND add character to your character. an example of a workaround is this:

"Wow."

Baekhyun grumbles as she ganders at the chaos of things in the attic - a few unopened boxes here, some paper bags there, Joonmyun and Jongdae written all over the mess. She goes through a list of reasons why she shouldn't berate Jongdae for leaving this mess to her until she spots a treasure chest in the corner of the room, noticeably clean despite the dust covering everything in sight.

you've provided a bit of insight to baekhyun, jongdae, and joonmyun's characters and, at the same time, showed the readers that hey, baekhyun's going through the mess in suchen's attic. she doesn't like it.

here's another example:

Chanyeol bolts upright from his bed. He's