The utter brilliance of seeing Spock's thought process so broken, so fragmented and frantic juxtaposed with his usually meticulous syntax is just genius.
As long as I am alive he is mine to hold and cherish
mine to kiss and caress and fuck and tongue and suck and whisper into his ear
that I am his. I adore this line. This whole chapter is so beautiful and fitting and poetic; the perfect follow-up to the tension and intensity of the last few chapters. In general, I really like how you modify the tone from chapter to chapter in such a way that sudden changes are a relief rather than jarring, and even when the emotion is really intense, it doesn't get to be too much before you throw something in to shift it a bit one way or another. Masterfully done, ne.
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(I have always thought their names so important -- "Jim" and "Spock" and his/my/mine and truth and secrets.)
This is perfect.
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<3
::is in absolute love::
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The utter brilliance of seeing Spock's thought process so broken, so fragmented and frantic juxtaposed with his usually meticulous syntax is just genius.
This is genius.
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mine to kiss and caress and fuck and tongue and suck and whisper into his ear
that I am his.
I adore this line. This whole chapter is so beautiful and fitting and poetic; the perfect follow-up to the tension and intensity of the last few chapters. In general, I really like how you modify the tone from chapter to chapter in such a way that sudden changes are a relief rather than jarring, and even when the emotion is really intense, it doesn't get to be too much before you throw something in to shift it a bit one way or another. Masterfully done, ne.
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