Wow. The emotional wallop at the end of this chapter is incredible. Jim guesses right, that Spock is so pissed off about the computer simulation 'wild card' that he can't see straight, and he's quoting the Vulcan ministers that he viciously told to "live long and prosper" after he rejected their offer at the Vulcan Science Academy (your compulsive need to rebel, and Spock salts the earth where Jim is most vulnerable (affirm your sense of self worth and Your ability to lead, such as it is, is undermined by your propensity to give unclear commands.), and he does it on the bridge?!
I found Jim's “We keep missing each other,” he said to no one... mostly heartbreaking.
Extraordinary work, from the text-book perfect technical writing to the climactic confrontation in this arc. I am lost in admiration. As always.
again, insightful comment above nullifies most of what I wanted to say but, I think I sense some sort of frustration from Spock too regarding the way that Kirk and him don't get along I'm not so sure it's anger as just frustration - he got some warning about the wild card and yes, of course he's a little miffed But I almost feel like in some way, if Kirk doesn't feel appreciated, Spock doesn't either - after all, he put a lot of damn effort into that report, and " The captain gave no indication that he heard, let alone understood, anything that I said. " and considering this is from his point of view, he must feel that Kirk did not address him when he said about them missing each other -- in which case I must ask, does this reflect the fact Spock feels like Kirk has given up on him too?
your story is thoroughly, THOROUGHLY enjoyable- as one of the commenters has alr mentioned, I don't notice the first person pov at all, it flows naturally and I'm never jarred by weirdness or bored. It's got me from the start, I didn't even have to "ease in"/let the story grow on me or whatever... I also want to second/third/etc your ability to write dialogue without naming the speakers. I'm always laughing at Spock's comments- his unintentionally hilarious, matter-of-fact, precise comments
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hmm, I feel like I should clarify, by "laughing at Spock's comments," I don't mean I'm always laughing at how "weeeird he is next to the humans," but during moments like: At times it is difficult to ascertain whether the captain is being deliberately obtuse so as to find amusement in my reactions, or whether his unintelligent comments reveal an equally unintelligent thought process. These two options are not mutually exclusive, just that last sentence- typically it would be played off as an understated sarcastic sense of humor, but since it's Spock, I recognize tt it's very serious and earnest. A very serious and earnest way of saying that Jim can be a jackass.
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I found Jim's “We keep missing each other,” he said to no one... mostly heartbreaking.
Extraordinary work, from the text-book perfect technical writing to the climactic confrontation in this arc. I am lost in admiration. As always.
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I'm not so sure it's anger as just frustration - he got some warning about the wild card and yes, of course he's a little miffed
But I almost feel like in some way, if Kirk doesn't feel appreciated, Spock doesn't either - after all, he put a lot of damn effort into that report, and " The captain gave no indication that he heard, let alone understood, anything that I said. " and considering this is from his point of view, he must feel that Kirk did not address him when he said about them missing each other -- in which case I must ask, does this reflect the fact Spock feels like Kirk has given up on him too?
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Other than that, I'll just point upwards and say "what Dani said."
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