Fic: Observations, Ch 115

[anon_j_anon]

Nyota’s words cause my chest to tighten. I force myself to relax and control myself. There is something burning inside me-I will not let it consume me. I turn my attention to the diplomat. The remainder of the evening, I feel Jim’s eyes watching me.

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[spookette]

First, thank you for uploading Observations onto Livejournal. FF.net is a pain in the ass, and it's much cleaner and easier to navigate/upload stories here.

Second - oh God, this last chapter. I should be all happy and bouncy that they finally came together (and I am, don't get me wrong), but I can't help but feel that this is going to end in tears. It feels like Spock has no idea what the hell he's doing, and with the line "There is something burning inside me-I will not let it consume me", it makes me think there's a precedent for heartbreak being set. Or maybe it's just the pessimist in me talking. I dunno. :(

Anyway, don't mind me, keep up the fantastic work!

[slicensmile]

Nyota comes to me with a sly expression on her face. “Mapenzi ni kikohozi, hayawezi kufichika.”

Indeed. Well said, Nyota. I love her and Spock's relationship; thank you for keeping them both real people.

And I am, of course, thrilled by these recent developments. Catching portions of Jim's thoughts is endlessly interesting. Honestly, the story was moving along so well without any explicit sexuality that I felt some trepidation what once they actually got involved it would somehow change the tone of the story, but it's still as wonderfully detail-oriented, character-focused, and realistic as ever. And what an imperfect and beautiful first kiss.

[batfan_sarah]

dude, this is so good so far. i can't wait for you to update - i'll defnintely be watching for it! :)

[yazmin_enbouton]

Uhura's words also made my chest tight D:

But I loved this chapter, after all the tension they have been accumulating this was the best way to get them together. It was beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time, a perfect chapter as usual :)

[emluv]

I think what I like most about this is the sense that Jim just isn't able to contain his emotions any longer--that his feelings for Spock just finally burst out of him. An interesting counterpoint to Spock's belief that he can contain whatever burns inside of himself. I suspect he'll be learning that some things aren't worth controlling...