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anniespinkhouse

The Unsuitable Slave. (NC-17) Part 10/34

Aug 25, 2011 13:12

Jared didn’t feel damned and he couldn't feel the flames of Hell's fire licking at his soul. In this moment he felt calm and even if he hated to admit it to himself, happy. Perhaps there was something else too, hope.

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meus_venator August 25 2011, 17:15:46 UTC

Great Chapter!!!!!

You know Jensen has to be the poorest slave owner in history. Maybe it's being a Prince, but poor Jared is floating in a sea of uncertainty. Never knowing what's expected of him or what's right, and facing Jensen's wrath as a result. I think his idea of a slave manual has some merit!

I think the tone here is perfect considering Jared was just brutalized, so why would he be super eager to have it done again. Nice staging for more trust. And I like that the back story to Jared's betrayal is exposed. So the big question is Chris Kane still alive, is he a slave now too? Or just a captive? I do wonder at Jared accepting his slavery so (relatively) easily. But maybe his life as a sheltered prince was very much like his life with Jensen... I love when he fights back, even with the 10 captives hanging over him, the guy was a Prince as well and used to having at least some of his own way.

And Happy is a good place to rest for a while.

anniespinkhouse August 28 2011, 16:35:27 UTC

Oh I missed this earlier. *hugs* thanks for commenting - yep I think Jensen is pretty rubbish at it -he's got a lot on his mind. I think he's so used to all the Palace slaves being trained that he forgets Jared hasn't a clue.
Hmm and I think you hit the nail on the head with Jared's acceptance.

fleeting_wings August 28 2011, 19:49:48 UTC

I love this complexity between them. Jared's mind is so confused; he wants Jensen, but he's scared of him, and yet Jensen's the only one that makes him feel safe. Ah, it's just complicated. Poor boys. I like that you ended this chapter on a more hopeful note for poor Jared, but bringing Jared to the court or whatever it was still makes me a bit nervous. Can't wait for more! ♥

anniespinkhouse August 29 2011, 23:55:36 UTC

Poor Jared, he is struggling with so many conflicting emotions, add in that he's still a teenager with all those issues...I should feel guilty for being so mean to him!
Thanks for commenting - spurs me on to bother posting when LJ is being such a bitch :)

fleeting_wings August 30 2011, 07:05:02 UTC

I know. Jensen calling him "Child" made me think Jensen sounded so old, but everyone calls Jared that so it helps now haha And don't feel guilty. I find that there's just way too many "Jared hurts Jensen" fics out there, so reading your stuff is just so nice for someone like me who's adverse to both hurt!Jensen and bottom!Jensen. Plus, you're awesome at being mean to Jared and you still manage to keep it realistic and undramatic. The characters actually have layers! I love it ♥

And no problem! You totally deserve it, and LJ just sucks like that. Boo.

firesign10 September 12 2011, 22:25:21 UTC

I finally made myself stop reading and leave a comment!! I am SO RIVETED to this story!! Love love love it!! So twisty and complex with who's doublecrossing who and so on, and then all the layers of Jared dealing with his new life and with Jensen, Jensen dealing with politics and his odd new slave, it's just really intriguing. And now we're getting to what I predict with be scorching sex once they get some of this stuff dealt with!! :-D

anniespinkhouse September 13 2011, 15:32:34 UTC

Thanks for the comment. I'm so pleased you picked up on Jensen dealing with politics etc outside of Jared. I wanted to write completely from Jared's POV, so it does skew opinion to 'his little world' but poor Jensen has a bigger picture to deal with that we don't see. (Of course I know exactly what he's up to but that would be telling...) ;)

jolieblon May 28 2012, 17:51:59 UTC

I'm getting as frustrated as Jared with how little instruction he's being given. They all know now that Jared is very motivated and highly intelligent. If they sat him down and went over what will be expected he would be a lot less likely to make mistakes.

I am glad that Jensen will not force Jared again, but I'm still nervous about this presentation at Court. It sounds like that's something that could take Jared away from Jensen.

How awful for Jared to hear how badly he'd been tricked and manipulated in his own home. There really is nothing left for him except possibly saving his sister.

{The Captain and young Jake, they are loyal to their Prince, to the end.”}
That 'ARE' gives me hope that both Christian and Jake are still alive.

anniespinkhouse May 28 2012, 21:19:10 UTC

It seems they are so used to court slaves coming to court fully trained that they really don't have a clue what to do with poor Jared. Jensen has a war on his hands and seems to forget that there's no way Jared can just know it all. As for the Realm - yep, big blow to find out the truth.
You may be very observant ;)