Entry for bleach_contest week #21 - entropy

[annieroo2]

week #21 - entropy

Title: One Simple Question
Rating: PG
Pairings/Characters: Kyouraku Shunsui and Ukitake Juushirou
Warnings: mention of yaoi relationship
Spoilers: none that I can think of
Word Count:  297
Word Limit: 300
Description:  One little girl changed Shunsui’s goal in life
Entropy - A measure of the disorder or randomness in a closed system
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Comments

[marinliliz]

Oh, lovely and it's a subject I've thought of too, why in a place supposed to be a haven, people have to suffer so much? And then it's ShunUki piece which is always wonderful.

[annieroo2]

LOL! Yeah it's pretty tough to go wrong with ShunUki. XD

Rukongai has always bugged me. So many of the shinigami come from there. Why hasn't someone said "Hey this system is pretty screwed up, maybe one of out jobs should be to do something about that".

I picked Shunsui since he'd been around for so long and since he drinks I thought I could use that as a mitigating factor.

I wonder if 2000 years ago it was better than it is now, or if it was just as screwed up.

Thanks for reading and commenting. :)

[hu3long2]

Like! Short and to the point! And the choice of characters was inspired-- two of the oldest shinigami- though I guess this begs the question-- and they took how long to notice this? So I'm not quite sure if you're indicting them, or praising them for wanting change! Interesting ambiguity... I'm using this word like mad today!

[annieroo2]

LOL!! I always figured it wasn't a matter of how long it took to notice, but that it used to be done right and just gradually deteriorated until no one knew how to fix it anymore.

I so wanted to go more in depth with my theories and reasons with this, but the word count simply wouldn't allow it.

I'm so happy you found it interesting.

I suppose I am both indicting them and praising them. The souls of Rukongai should be under their protection. But imagine after it has gotten this far out of control how hard it would be to reign back in. 4 billion souls to straighten out and protect is a little much for even shinigami.

[ceres_wish]

Wow, i like this, mainly because it explores what i felt for some time. Whenever Rukia performs konso, she always said SS is a good place to go to and all that, and i feel that is, well not very true.

Good job on reflecting the feelings of a soul in the waste of Rukongai itself!!!

[annieroo2]

I always felt Rukia was saying that more to placate the souls than anything. It's her job to perform konsou, but some souls in the lowest number districts really do have a chance at a decent after life.

I mean can you imagine how hard it would be to get a soul to cross over if they knew they'd be going to district 80?! After seeing Rukongai, I think I'd take my chances with the hollows in the living world. ;)

Thanks for reading and leaving lovely remarks. :)

[yawns_widely]

What's up with me today? On the last few entries, most of everything I wanted to say had already been done so by others and ceres_wish is no different with her insightful commentary.

I agree wholeheartedly. I feel the same way, and always wondered at Rukia's perspective/reasoning/motive to say, what she did to Ichigo.

I liked what you did with the child, because it made the narrative personal, and I think an encounter such as that, as you said yourself, 'Her despondency tore at his soul and it was clear from this encounter why he avoided this place,' would be the only way to jolt Shunsui into action, given his removal from the place and his escape into sleep and inebriation - which is the kind of Shunsui you depict here. I think it makes him human, but I also think it reflects badly on others (quite rightly) and is grey in areas that aren't immediately obvious.

The last line made me smile. Good job.

P.S. Great use of 'finagled' I had to look it up to know what it meant :D

[annieroo2]

LOL!! Finagled was one of my dad's favorite words. It's been so long since I'd heard it, I have no idea what even made me think of it. But when I did, I figured that was definitely see something I could see Nanao doing and Kyouraku thinking. XD

Well I could say your brilliance is simply rubbing off on others, that's why you comments are already taken. :) But then you'd just scoff at me, so I'll refrain... XD

Thank you once again for your kind words. I always love the fact you seem to be able to read things into my story that I'm always convinced are never clear enough for anyone to pick up. Sometimes I make my theories vague enough that no finds them (Rukia was carrying twins in my first fanfic) and other times less so like with Shunsui's drinking. Out of the 5 you've reviewed, Rukia's twins was the only one you missed and frankly on a re-read I think it was too well hidden to find.

Weee! I made you smile. *loves you*

[akiahara]

You combined our edits beautifully, I'm completely impressed. I love it. <3

[annieroo2]

Whew!! I was so concerned that I had ruined the story by chopping so much out of it.

Thanks for the lovely comments. And as always my undying gratitude for helping me out with my stories.

*hugs*

[vayshti]

Juushiro and Shunsui for the new world order?

I'd vote for that ticket over Aizen/Gin.

And she may only get one line, but it still ups my love for Nanao - it's damned clear she did this to Shunsui for the exact purpose of rousing his spirit again.

[annieroo2]

Yeah for Nanao-chan love!! I get such a kick out of her. I was so worried with the word count I'd have to to cut her involvement. I had some powerful help that salvaged her. :D

Wouldn't ShunJuu make a great pair for running Soul Society? They have the experience, yet we know from Rukia's rescue they aren't adverse to bucking the system or changing the rules when it comes to what's right.

Sorry my fangirl is showing.... XD

[vayshti]

Agrees with everything you've said. Does this mean my inner fangirl is outing itself with a big pink neon sign as well??

[annieroo2]

Well.... Only if you like pink, otherwise we can use some other color. XD