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Confession of Pain - Teen (Snarry , Lucius)

Feb 08, 2007 22:35

Title: Confession of Pain
Author: sapphiretragedy
Rating: Teen
Challenge: 27 Dark!Harry/Severus Lucius as slave (servant). For thematic_hp.
Characters: Harry/Severus, Lucius
Warnings: Dark!Harry
Notes: Feedback is always welcome.

( Revenge is a confession of pain. - Latin proverb )

teen, dark!harry, snarry, lucius, challenge

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sapphiretragedy February 16 2007, 04:18:16 UTC

I wasn't interested in a large story with plot. You'll find most of my stories aren't really strong in plot. I'm more interested in character study; which I feel this was. There could have been more to make it stronger. Of that I agree. This though was meant to be a slice of life kind of thing. Maybe I didn't pull it off the way I thought I did,though? I don't know.

But the questions you ask: What of Draco and Narcissa? and What of Harry's personality? Those questions don't really mean anything to me. As a reader, I would be interested. But as a writer? Those kinds of questions aren't interesting for me to follow up on.

But if I had to come up with an answer I could tell you that this Harry in this situation cares not of Draco and Narcissa - he wanted Lucius. The only way he would go after Draco and Narcissa is if Lucius had been killed.

I really appreciate your comments and your feedback. Who knows they might inspire more out of this - maybe. I'm thinking of working this scenario into a bigger story I'm working on. We'll see.

Again, thank you so much for reading and for the feedback. It means a lot.

xos2ed February 24 2007, 04:39:02 UTC

"This though was meant to be a slice of life kind of thing"

I understand what youre saying completely and thats probabally how the story was meant to be written, but i feel like a slice of life would be in the middle of lucius serving harry, but you start at the beginning. i dont know if that was on purpose or not.

I almost enjoy that delacate balance of picking when to end a story - and you do that well. The questions that i mentioned - and i might just be in a different mood then i was when i first reviewed - but left up to the imagination, the reader can have fun with them, and it leaves an imprint of your story in their mind. When you answer the questions as an author, it leaves room for disappointment, but that doesnt mean you cant answer them. I guess it just depends.

this really didnt have much of a point, im just discussing the different views inside my head - and apparently on this screen.

ill try to think of a more coherent reply

~loves~

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