i bought the first book a couple days ago. firstly, i agree the technical writing is quite horrible in some/most places. i kept thinking as i was reading: lord, i wrote like this when i was like twelve. which kind of actually made me cringe because i had written a story with a similar level of 'unreadable-ness' at that age. i actually wondered, if there are so many editing and overlooking and proofing stages between first draft and final publication of a novel, how could any dingbat pretty much miss all the cheese leaving grease marks on the paper? but im a sucker for the storyline and the theme and the main romance idea. i just feel like she really missed something awesome by the amateur writing. it IS possible to write WITH BEAUTIFUL WORDS a harrowing passionate love story between two completely disparate people: Romeo/Juliet, Catherine Earnshaw/Heathcliffe; that the writing can have such a quality that you can take out quotes and just treasure those by themselves. its like SM slips from this opportunity alot- there arent too many passages in the book, if any, that you can isolate and kind of dwell on for a while cos sometimes they're shit. i think Twilight is still exciting but readers have to make it that way for themselves. and readers have the ability to do that with the story idea that SM put forward. Vampire true love with insignificant everyday ordinary girl. I DO believe SM tapped into something there. i thought since i only bought the first novel a couple days ago i would wait a while until the book wasnt so new anymore - then take to it with a pen, scratch and scribble some of the ill-used words, and do away with some sentences altogether. A couple of irritants: some of the sentences didnt flow you know? and it was like she was doing a Mariah Carey and just looking at the thesaurous for a couple of smart looking and totally unneccessary words where one classic knockout wouldve done more effectively. lots of adjectives ending in 'ly' that disrupted the flow of your reading; she used 'clearly' alot. Too often. Her writing definitely distracted from the story. but i give her credit for main notions. despite the cringy words, i really do love the idea of a difficult, complex intense romance. just wish wish wish to death she'd written it better.
i actually wondered, if there are so many editing and overlooking and proofing stages between first draft and final publication of a novel, how could any dingbat pretty much miss all the cheese leaving grease marks on the paper?
but im a sucker for the storyline and the theme and the main romance idea. i just feel like she really missed something awesome by the amateur writing. it IS possible to write WITH BEAUTIFUL WORDS a harrowing passionate love story between two completely disparate people: Romeo/Juliet, Catherine Earnshaw/Heathcliffe; that the writing can have such a quality that you can take out quotes and just treasure those by themselves. its like SM slips from this opportunity alot- there arent too many passages in the book, if any, that you can isolate and kind of dwell on for a while cos sometimes they're shit. i think Twilight is still exciting but readers have to make it that way for themselves. and readers have the ability to do that with the story idea that SM put forward. Vampire true love with insignificant everyday ordinary girl. I DO believe SM tapped into something there.
i thought since i only bought the first novel a couple days ago i would wait a while until the book wasnt so new anymore - then take to it with a pen, scratch and scribble some of the ill-used words, and do away with some sentences altogether. A couple of irritants: some of the sentences didnt flow you know? and it was like she was doing a Mariah Carey and just looking at the thesaurous for a couple of smart looking and totally unneccessary words where one classic knockout wouldve done more effectively. lots of adjectives ending in 'ly' that disrupted the flow of your reading; she used 'clearly' alot. Too often. Her writing definitely distracted from the story. but i give her credit for main notions. despite the cringy words, i really do love the idea of a difficult, complex intense romance. just wish wish wish to death she'd written it better.
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