Bleach fic: Instinct/Illusion

[ann89103]

Title: Instinct/Illusion
Fandom: Bleach
Paring: Renji/Shuuhei & a second, unnamed pair
Rating: R
Warnings: Dub-con (open to interpretation), mention of character deaths
Word Count: 7,360
Summary: Shuuhei and Renji: important moments over the years
Notes: Written for yaoi_challenge. Alternate Reality, though using much of the canon storyline through the current

Comments

[xglimpsex]

Wow. To be honest, it seemed almost like two different fics to me. The progression from preslash to a relationship was one seperate story, and then the possesion and the unvieling was another.

Was that intentional or do I need to sleep more?

But, in anycase, that ending was absolutely haunting. Such a gorgeously, diabolical plot twist. (You should have seen me, 'Not AKON!' I whined it in the library.)_

[ann89103]

You do not need to sleep more. *g*

The Agatha Christie quote is exactly where the story changes, with Renji's death and Aizen taking his place in Seireitei. I'll be curious to find out if that's how most readers interpreted it or if they caught on to the twist later.

Thank you! I could probably do a whole fic just on Shuuhei dealing with the repercussions of Aizen's illusions: too bad Shuuhei doesn't have the time to think about that now.

I did think of you while writing the Akon part (mostly, "I wonder if she will kill me for this?", lol).

[xglimpsex]

NICE!
I was wondering, because the vibe completely changed. I didn't exactly see AIZEN coming, but I knew something... was off.

(I won't kill you, I was just overjoyed to see him and then... dead.)

[ann89103]

I won't kill you, I was just overjoyed to see him and then... dead.

It is bad that I found the way you phrased that to be extremely funny? 'Cause I totally did!

It's with stories like this that I hate writing disclaimers, because... how much to you warn for, yet keep the twist from being revealed upfront? I'm so glad you picked up on the vibe changing: I was hoping most readers wouldn't pick up on the twist right away, but get close to the end and say, 'hey, what's going on here?' and then go back and say 'a-ha, I see that you did there!'

Poor Akon wasn't even originally intended to be in the fic, but since I had some alternating Shuuhei and Renji portions in the first half, I felt I had to keep the pattern going. That, and it was a good way to hint that things were not right with 'Renji' at all: calling somebody else uncouth? Renji? Dead giveaway!

[xglimpsex]

You were. That was my attempt at being humorous.
LOL.
(I need Akon icons, srs.)