26: Commentary on 'Serenade'
This started when I was doing a collage for Art, and I wanted to involve a nightingale in it. That eventually became some lines for a poem, which became a paragraph when I thought the description would work better in fiction. Thus, you get my first story (or what I like to call a story, and I think is decent--and complete--enough that I will claim it). The rest came later as I decided it would be a short vignette (I was aiming for 200 words--like Cherie Priest's archetypes, remember those?). It ended up at about 250, which isn't bad at all.
So, I first started this back in January, and this last rewrite is from September. And just in case you're wondering, the long time I spend on things has more to do with the fact that I work in isolated spurts--I need to work on a more steady schedule ofr writing...*collapses*
I worked really hard on the last paragraph, but most of the the second paragraph is quite new. The hints about Her mostly imagining the implied romance between them is new as well. What I really like about this is how at first it makes him seem like an actual suitor, and though I don't directly say it, it becomes apparent by the end that he's a bird. It's beautiful and sad and I'm really proud of it.
Please promptly proceed with ripping it to shreds. *grin*