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papper_docka December 6 2012, 15:11:08 UTC
Teehee! I can just see them all at that club, the scene is so vivid! The only thing that's missing is some dude wearing nothing but suspenders and a cowboy hat. ;) Since we've already got one dressed up as Kylie. :) This is hilarious and even though I have no way of knowing how men who spend a lot of time together act when they get drunk with zero chicks around, I imagine there's a sense of well established familiarity that lets them take the piss without offence, plus hey, it's okay in football! ;)

"You are much better looking than Raúl," Xabi says as he'd say pass the salt or let me know when you burst forward on the left and walks off calmly to the bar. Flirting a little there, Xabi, huh? ;) Not that he's ever had to, but I like how the booze made him bolder to just state the fact so naturally. You really capture the sparks in a beautiful way, where it was awkward before, it's tipsily smooth now, the elated, excited mood is palpable!

And good for them for having attended parties like that. It must be hell of a lot easier to joke around with gay guys, even if they hit on you, then fending off fangirls who won't take no for an answer. ;)

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an_only_tree December 13 2012, 18:21:27 UTC
I've been rereading this whole thing a lot (because well... lots of time to kill and no internet) and your comments are really helping me sort of... guide my writing, if that makes any sense, especially how they've evolved around each other.

Bestest reader ever! :)

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papper_docka December 13 2012, 19:19:21 UTC
Really? Well, I'm glad to be of help, even though I don't quite know how I do it! :)

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