Mythical Simplicity (Chapter 5)

[amyross]

Author's Note: Checking this, I remembered that writing bits of it (well, most of it) was like being dragged over red hot shards of broken glass by wild, incontinent horses while listening to fingernails and cats' claws on a blackboard. So I'm sorry if bits are tiresome. I was trying to keep to the period, and some of the people are irritating. The

Comments

[gigglestheblood]

Hey, another great chapter! I really liked this but there's just one little historical discrepancy that I wanted to point out in case you didn't already know. That sort of thing was illegal in England back then so they would probably get reported to the police if they were discovered. So yeah, I don't expect you to like, rewrite it or anything, I just wanted to point it out. :)

[amyross]

Yeah, I was aware of that when I was writing. I actually started to write little about that, then I changed my mind.

I was a law student, in Britain, for a little while (not a terribly long time, because I hated it). As I understand it, certain acts were illegal, and much more recently than 1913, but not necessarily the mere state of being. Incidences of prosecutions were relatively rare (or, at least, there's a wide gulf between legal evidence and social/cultural evidence). Some occurrences must have gone unprosecuted.

Also, the main reason I left it out was that something like that would have been public, and the main fear was for the reputation of the school. I toyed with the idea of having him threaten them with the law, but decided against opening that can of worms.

Or, in less serious mode, it's a daft little fanfic and I didn't want to get bogged down in technicalities and lost the main point of the story.

But you're right, it was, and IRL there's every chance it would have happened.

[order_of_chaos]

It's lovely, though, even if you didn't like it; John feeling shattered but safe and Harry looking after him - that was very sweet, with a side-dish of "if they only knew" evil laughter for flavouring. I'll look forward to the next bit.

[amyross]

Thanks. I don't dislike it, exactly, it was just a bit of a bitch to write.

I did have fun with the idea that Harry has been a complete contrast to the Master, and only a threat to John brings out his darker side.

That was the main point of writing this chapter, and also to bring about a little coincidence in the next one. Oh, and finally, some adult content in the next one!

[x_bluerose_x]

Wooow. Intense, and I looove the whole John feeling safe with Harry bit (tee hee). Looking forward to the rest!!

[amyross]

Yes, I enjoy that irony too!

Chapter 6 (final chapter) tomorrow.

Thanks!

[super_six_one]

Despite what you think about this chapter, personally it was one of my favorites. The exchanges between John and Harry seem so real that it's easy to get lost in the story. Thank you for posting more. :)

[amyross]

Thank you. That's lovely of you to say so. Sometimes the exchanges felt so awkward and hesistant, to me, that I wondered if anyone else would have patience with them. But I suppose it works if it's natural.

More tomorrow!

[gritsinmisery]

Finally got around to jiggering my cookies so I could read this and wow. What fun!

[amyross]

Thanks! I'm glad you like it!

Chapter 6 tomorrow, and then the epilogue on Sunday or Monday.

And then the sequel!