Never mind I see where they say 1/10 thought I caught that. But all the Post Title say 2/10 so I'm not going to worry about it. No one reads the Headers anyway... :-P
How Colin had found out that it had been sent to Bloom Dominica again hadn’t asked. Sometimes it was just better off not knowing these things.
For a sec there I thought Dom had morphed for the purposes of the fic, but I have my head on straight now so it's all good.
I love how naturally we learn more about the story and this universe through the latter half of this chapter; it feels like Orlando's freaking out about his sister but we learn a lot about him and his relationship with her as well as where the whole thing starts. It's a nice neat build-up to the action coming up later.
LOL...ooops...sorry. When I'm more awake I'll change that...maybe... :-)
This chapter used to have a lot more talking and caused a bit of drama between my beta and I but in the end we decided it was better to take the slow build wrote than put all the information in all at once. I almost took everything out but thought that his relationship with his sister is really important, and something I found lacking in the movie I never felt any real connection between them other than blood. Which can be enough but I wanted it to be much more than that.
Wow...I really need to take a nap I have no clue if what I wrote above makes any sense or not. Sorry if it doesn't.
It makes perfect sense - and you're right, obviously his relationship with Samantha is important otherwise he wouldn't be dropping everything to go rescue her. I think it would be confusing if there was much more exposition there, but if you wanted more talking it would have to be carefully worked in but might take the reader's attention away from the Viggo connection.
OK, I'm imagining Colin Farrel playing the guy who's so obsessed with the "snappers" and I'm giggling uncontrollably. Which is good -- I've never been a major Colin fan and this is just funny enough to work really well for me. :D
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I doubled checked at all the comms I posted at they all say 2/10...
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For a sec there I thought Dom had morphed for the purposes of the fic, but I have my head on straight now so it's all good.
I love how naturally we learn more about the story and this universe through the latter half of this chapter; it feels like Orlando's freaking out about his sister but we learn a lot about him and his relationship with her as well as where the whole thing starts. It's a nice neat build-up to the action coming up later.
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This chapter used to have a lot more talking and caused a bit of drama between my beta and I but in the end we decided it was better to take the slow build wrote than put all the information in all at once. I almost took everything out but thought that his relationship with his sister is really important, and something I found lacking in the movie I never felt any real connection between them other than blood. Which can be enough but I wanted it to be much more than that.
Wow...I really need to take a nap I have no clue if what I wrote above makes any sense or not. Sorry if it doesn't.
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Dom and Colin are quite the pair, hopefully we'll see more of them!
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Yeah they do make quite the pair but Dom definitly wishes they weren't one...poor Dommie.
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Yeah I'm not a huge Colin fan either but I thought he'd be awesome in the role plus my beta does like him so I thought she'd get a kick out of him.
Still no comments on Viggo? ;-)
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