Fading, Fear ("I Love You")

[amber_serkly]

Title: Fading, Fear ("I Love You")
Pairing: Onew/Key
Genre: Angst
Rating: R (implied smut)
Warning: english is not my first language :)
Summary: There isn't much courage in him to keep trusting. Thus the excessive love he showers him.

Comments

[tofubi]

uhmm im guessing onew is unconsciously abusing key?

[amber_serkly]

uh-huh yep he is.
I was afraid ppl won't get it at first :3

[tofubi]

nahhh i thnk you delivered it perfectly :) im excited to read more from you >_

[amber_serkly]

wooott thank you for the support! :D

[emptycavern]

Though you "warned" that english is not your first language, I have to say that you write pretty well :)

But ahh why, Onew abusing Key makes me feel so sad. His desperate love and insecurities breaks my heart

[amber_serkly]

thank you so much, that means a lot to me :D
LOL sorry for breaking your heart XD *quickly mends the pieces*
it's just that I'm too much of an angst lover to give them a happy ending X)

[theia88]

i didn't quite get it until someone mentioned above that onew is unconsciously abusing key...
oh but why he's s unconscious? i really didn't get the point of this..or it's me who really really dumb or something.. T.T

[amber_serkly]

omg I'm sorry if it's confusing ;~;
I intended to leave it like that so the reader would predict the conflict by themselves. But this is what I was afraid of, if someone can't get the point -.-
nooooooooo why would you say that you're dumb, it's my fault :<
so.. basically Jinki and Kibum are in a relationship, lovers, blahblahblah.
and everything kind of start when Jinki somehow feels that Kibum would eventually leave him, so he can't really bring himself to trust him.
there's already something wrong in the first scene, with Jinki's unnecessary anxiety and Kibum's smile.
it builds fears in Jinki until he unconsciously did some 'crazy' things just to make Kibum stay, (the mess in living room and sort of bloodied belt) he doesn't even know it.
and the rest is, well, up to your imagination.
umm what do you think if I make another chap in Kibum's POV? ^^;

[theia88]

omg...so it is like that..thanks for the explanation, i get it right now. i wish Jinki could just talk to Kibum what had been fearing him so that Kibum can at least tell him that he won't leave instead of abusing him :( (well, at least in my perspective i think kibum won't ever want to leave Jinki either...)
oh don't worry... i rarely read fictions with this kind of style so it's understandable if i got confused at first. but i think the rest of your readers get the point right, so yeah..part of it it's my inability to understand the fic thru the writing style, so it's not completely your fault bcs actually you write it good ^^
oh, it will be nice if i can read kibum's POV but it's up to you if you need to write it.. ofc by considering your time and idea. but i'm also looking forward to your other fics.. i hope you'll write onkey more ;)

[amber_serkly]

oh do you, now? :D sorry again for confusing you :>
and thanks for giving my fic a try! :D
now that I had said that, I feel like I really have to make the sequel >v<
ooohh don't worry, OnKey is my OTPforeternity so there will definitely be more of it :>

[amber_serkly]

glad that you like it! :D
LOL it's not called 'angst' for nothing right? XD
but maybe I'll write happy OnKey later :>
thanks for the comment ^^

[melalocket]

This is awesome!!
I love this !!! :D

[amber_serkly]

thank youuu :D
LOL you sound a lil bit too happy after reading such angst fic XD