Fic! :]

[amazingly_me]

Oh yes, here there be fic. ;]

I still owe a couple of people fic commentaries-- I promise I'm working on them! And I'd still welcome more requests, because I've had a blast doing the first couple. Give me a chance to commentate-- commentize? commentatify?-- over here!

Title: Portals of Discovery
Rating: PG
Characters/Pairings: Remus/Sirius

Comments

[dollsome]

Oh my gosh, this is beautiful. That last line, oh jeez! What a line, good Lord, lady -- I seriously just felt like I got literally swept up into that sentence, and then it was unexpectedly the last one and there was this wonderful sudden drop and it was just left to resonate and WOW, what a great sentence. (Um. I got up too early this morning. I'm sorry. But that line hit me in a way words put together to form a sentence haven't in ages. Thank you for reminding me that writing can be amazing.)

I love the air of tension to this, and the conflict between sort of being too old and too young all at once. And you have such a wonderful unique whimsy to how you write, it's just so interesting and bright and I love it!

My extra-favourite lines, the ones that kind of just slapped me in the heart with how much I loved them:

Sometimes his fingers shake. Always they are pale, and skinny, and sharp. Sometimes they shake. And Remus wants very much to hold them still, and sits on his own hands to stop himself.

Oh, man, THAT. I love the way you powerfully sum up their whole dynamic, their whole situation, with such a completely perfectly simple description. Gaaaah, my heart, it's just amazing.

he feels suddenly very small, and remembers when he had a crush (a real crush, the sort that crushes you, presses you into the ground, makes you want to burst into sonnets, or snogging)

I love, love "The sort that crushes you" -- that is just so wonderfully apt.

Sirius says, and Remus wants to smile, to open his mouth and let out rainbows and butterflies and probably happy anthropomorphic deer.

HAPPY ANTHROPOMORPHIC DEAR. I love you! And I love this, and I love them, and I haven't really thought about that last one for a really long time, so thank you for reminding me! This ship is too awesome to get lost in the dustiest recesses of my brain.

This totally brightened up my rather crappy morning; thank you a thousand times over! ♥

ahahaha coherency? so overrated!

[amazingly_me]

ASDFLJKASDF;JKLSADF;JK YOU'RE GIVING ME THE WARM FUZZIES OVER HERE. :D

You and saraannette are probably two of my, er, most favoritest writers (I don't need grammar-- I have the power of squee) and you guys have been so overwhelmingly lovely about this fic that I'm ACTUALLY NOT SURE WHAT TO DO. I got all squirmy and happy reading your comment; it was a tad ridiculous. ;]

Anywho! I'm so very glad you liked it, and I was quite happy to see that you favorite lines were some of mine as well, since it was a nice boost to the ol' ego. :P

THANK YOU FOR COMMENTING. I am bouncing around in my chair being gleeful, seriously. :D