[Critique Me] Pushkin stanzas on the brain
Poem, currently untitled. If you can think of something better than "Ode to the Tunnels", leave it in the comments and I'll give you a cookie. Footnotes for people not familiar with MIT.
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And I see what you mean about the verbiage -- 's what comes of writing at 2am without much goal other than "musing". Though I will submit this plea in favor of the passage you cited: the bit about hacking was something I was really aiming for all along, and then when I got to it, I realized I couldn't put any of the cool stuff in, for the sake of privacy and discreetness. Yes, it's no excuse. But the hacking is important. And if I ever present this poem to an audience of hackers (unlikely), I will revise it to put in more specific hacking stuff. If you're curious, ping me privately.
WRT footnotes...I'm not sure who I intend this to be read by. Probably no one, TBH, though for kicks I might submit it (edited) to Rune, MIT's artsy-literary publication. For the moment, the audience of this poem is the readership of this LJ, and since I'm always writing things about MIT anyway, I don't think they hurt. But I'm probably not going to go any more public.
(Perhaps it says something about how much I've internalized the culture & references from here, that MIT-specific words & phrases are what jump to mind when I have to make something fit?)
And yeah, tunnels FTW.
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As for the "discretion" thing... oh, the things I could write about if I weren't restricted by that. Am curious about particulars, and will catch you on AIM sometime.
LJ=post anything. Me=someone who generally critiques for people who intend to have audiences.
As for internalized culture: dunno, it's something that happens really quickly. Usually doesn't take me more than a week to start speaking a place's jargon. Shorter if I'm surrounded by it constantly.
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