I've written about 2500 words in Armor X. Re-reading them, I don't think they're bad, but I'm not sure they're a good enough hook for drawing a reader in.
( The Hook )

Becky is currently in a play over at west valley college. She decided that she would offer to host this weekend's cast party since our house is great for that. On the invitation was some very clear and distinct text:

"If you plan to drink alcohol bring a designated driver or plan to sleep over"

I think the language there checks out nicely... Maybe ( Read more... )