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I Prefer the Mind Control Rewrite - Chapter 19

Jan 26, 2013 20:19

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This chapter is slightly NSFW.

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After Syra was finally done with me, she washed up got dressed. Only after that did she let me out of the funky glowstick handcuffs. While I was stretching myself out, Syra gathered up the clothing I had worn into Xan’s bedroom. She smirked at me. “There’s no reason you need these.”

( I looked at her, confused. )

character: syra, pairing: syra/dylan, character: dylan, 500themes, pov: dylan, nsfw (actual sexual content - really!), character: xan, pairing: xan/dylan, series: i prefer the mind control

Comments 4

theun4givables January 27 2013, 03:44:01 UTC

Oh, Dylan's parents. I love how they just basically were like what? Okay. Well we just wanna meet this guy and see if he's legit, first. Because otherwise we don't want him anywhere near our boy, lolol.

I'm amused that Dylan was so willing to walk around naked for Xan and Syra. I'm definitely liking Xan more in this, and Syra's pretty fucking cool, too. Love that she's more down to earth and actually paying attention to shit, even if Xan isn't.

alien_writings January 27 2013, 12:24:20 UTC

Dylan's parents are fun; I enjoy writing them, anyway. I finally created a narrator whose parents are actually likable! Seemingly all of them who had parents had asshole parents, so I'm glad Dylan's parents are decent people. I think they probably fall into Open-Minded Parent territory, especially if the plot goes in the direction I think it will. Then again, it might not go in that direction. It's warpy, lol.

Since Xan is so very...not down to Earth, it helps a lot that Syra is, doesn't it? I'm glad you're liking Xan more in this rewrite. He has an actual personality this time! And Dylan is...very willing, in general, haha.

n3m3sis42 January 29 2013, 00:28:03 UTC

Dylan's parents are... interesting. It's nice that they're so supportive, but wow are they ever goofy. Also, I find it amusing that the rumor about Dylan "being queer and sleeping with anyone" gets brought up just before Dylan is about to go off to a planet where everyone is queer and basically sleeps with anyone. He should have said something about irony and then asked if he was using "irony" correctly. Yeah, I'm stupid.

alien_writings February 4 2013, 12:48:16 UTC

Lol, maybe he should have done that! The irony went totally unnoticed by me, oops.

Dylan's parents are goofy, aren't they? I wanted to write a character who (for once) didn't have jerkass (or nonexistent) parents. Writing nice (if goofy) parents is weird, yo.