I Prefer the Mind Control Rewrite - Chapter 3

[alien_writings]

This is the third chapter in my rewrite of I Prefer the Mind Control. I hope the rewrite is even more awesome than the original!

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---------To start a wonderful fucking morning, I slept through my alarm. This meant I had exactly zero time to take a shower if I wanted to make it to my 8:30AM French test on time. Professor Moore was

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[theun4givables]

Oh, Dylan. I felt so bad for him when he didn't make it to his class in time to take the test. Poor guy really needed to catch a break there and he really didn't.

And then the conversation he overheard with Bonnie and Preston? Oh man. Talk about an odd thing to listen in on. Because he knows he shouldn't have listened in on that at all and then he found out that Preston not only likes him but was pretty in denial about it and poor bbs.

I am liking this version so much more so far. I feel bad for Preston, too. Having his denial broken like that and right then. And to have Dylan witness it? They just both need a hug. A big squishy hug.

Or hurt/comfort sex because damnit I think I'm writing Preston/Dylan soon

[alien_writings]

I wasn't being very nice to either of these dudes, was I? No, I don't think I was, haha.

That would be one weird conversation to overhear. I didn't think it would go down this way, but then it did because stories are mega-warpable. And now the whole damn story wants to warp into something utterly unexpected.

There might be...ah, hugging in the canon, if the story warps how I think it might warp.

[n3m3sis43]

Do it do it do it (the h/c sex awwww yeah)

[n3m3sis43]

Awww, poor bbs. I totally felt for both of them in this chapter. I definitely ship those two and I'm sure I'm not gonna be the only one. It will be interesting to see if Dylan ends up with Xan or Preston in this version. I'm really enjoying this rewrite, either way. Much more emotional depth this time around.

[pixiebelle]

Okay, I really liked how he addressed us in this chapter. That was pretty cool and it seemed to fit. Especially this part:

You know why I’m digressing into random bullshit? Because I don’t want to fucking think about what an abject failure I am. I hope you’re not judging me, because I don’t need that right now.

It really made you feel the character's situation more and made that part stronger, I think. I liked that part a lot.

Now I see where your concerns come into play with who he ends up with. Haha well I think either way, Preston or Xan, things could be happy and people would like it. I like both so far and I like the possibility of a love triangle in the future.

[winters_queen]

Poor Dylan. Cursed to be the guy who didn't have hacker intellect. You horrible author you. :)

Ooooo awkward moment at the end there with Preston. But at least they're still bros.

[alien_writings]

It was an awkward moment, indeed, but Dylan was decent about it. :)

I can be pretty horrible to my characters sometimes, haha.