a story for Ann

[aliana1]

A few months ago, I solicited a story request from just_ann_now, who asked for something in which Mag the Cook (her OC), Nanny (edoraslass's OC), and Narrator (my OC), all hang out together. Here it is, as a general "thanks for being awesome" but also as a belated birthday present. Hope you like it, Ann!

Take Your Daughter to Work Day
Characters: Mag the Cook, Nanny,

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[just_ann_now]

Quick comment: eeee, thank you, this is lovely! I'll be sure to tell EL (whose birthday is actually, next Friday, and I'll be back after breakfast with more loving commentary. Once again: eeee!

[aliana1]

Hooray, I'm so glad that you like it (and thanks for telling EL)! ♥

[just_ann_now]

Ok let's see how far we can get with my loving and exhaustive commentary!

It is all right, Meli wants to say, and then in her head she hears the snap again. She blinks.

Wow! That’s a way to grab our interest right out of the gate. (I was thinking about something going on with Meli’s neck, and ouch)

"She just wanted to come with me, so badly," Ma says, and now she's talking to the other two women as though they have accused her of doing something bad, although they have not.

It’s almost painful, here, to see Narrator so fretful, where we’re used to her being more confident, especially at this point in her life (Of course, I’ve read the whole thing, so I know exactly why she’s being fretful, but, still)

She doesn't mean to be like this, but sometimes it seems that her eyes and her ears won't stop roaming around on their own, that the world is always so full of sound and movement and new things tumbling out one after the other, and that everything gets all shaken up together Oh. Oh! Neurodivergency in M-E? I like this

[aliana1]

It’s almost painful, here, to see Narrator so fretful, where we’re used to her being more confident, especially at this point in her life

Yeah, she's struggling, here. She wants really badly for her children not to suffer from the kinds of deprivations that she had when she was younger, and then she goes and accidentally traumatizes one of them (whoops!). But she'll be fine, and so will Meli.

(For the record, Valacar also thought that it was a bad idea to take an eleven-year-old to medieval surgery practice, and told Narrator that she was making a mistake, but this is also what he told her on her wedding day, and so she ignores him whenever he says that to her.)

Oh. Oh! Neurodivergency in M-E? I like this!

Yeah! I imagine that Meli probably has what we would today call an attention deficit disorder, or some kind of sensory processing condition.

Nanny walking Meli through the City - Meli showing Nanny her city, the one that’s important to her, and Nanny seeing it through her eyes, just as she saw it through Boromir and Faramir’s

[just_ann_now]

♥