Poem for my father's city

[alethea7]

I've been feeling creative lately. Here is my latest effort

Comments

[por_que_no]

<3

we know mediterranean-blooded yankees are so much hotter than southern hicks anyways.

at least, we can outdrink them all...

[langostino]

It's rather ironic that you invoke Henry Ford right after implying that living in North Carolina makes one more racist than living in Detroit.

[alethea7]

just couldn't help yourself, eh? you make a good point, however, you could just help me edit it, that might be a little more constructive.

[langostino]

I just pointed out an irony, which in my book doesn't necessarily mean a flaw. If you see it as a flaw, adjust the poem as you see fit. You're the poet.

Feedback--that is, knowing how a reader reacts--is the first step in constructive criticism.