Kink Bingo_Masters/slaves/Doms/subs Part 3

[aleksiina_26]

Title: Control

Chapter: 3/3 [Oneshot]

Rating: NC-17

Pairing: Tora x Yuki [ex-Lolita23q], Yuki x OMC, mild Tora x OFC [yup, warming up my spot in fanfic hell]

Genre: PWP

Warnings: male x male, non explicit male x female, BDSM, D/s relationships, humiliation, bondage, flogging, toy-play, exhibitionism, voyeurism, public sex, mentions of polyamory, foul

Comments

[aleksiina_26]

Its monstrous! I've written bigger pieces but this one really kicked the shit out of me lol XD I'm happy you thought it was worth the wait ;)

I used to have that issue too, until I read extremely good female x male stuff and realized it can be done. Not to say that the average het story doesn't make me want to gouge my eyes out, theres some really awful stuff out there, but then again, theres some really horrible yaoi out there too XD I want to try to make occasional het in j-rock fic more acceptable, not make it the norm by any means (I love my yaoi, unf) but I think it deserves some effort. Het can be just as hot and emotionally charged as yaoi when its well done imho. I'm glad you read it anyway even if its not your cup of tea ;)

Lacking in what aspects really? I'm always up for constructive criticism and if I can improve this baby via your suggestions I definitely will ;) By all means let me know what I could improve on :D (I've been writing less than a year and english is my second language so I'll take all the help I can get lol XD) Thanks for reading and commenting! xoxo

[jrockforver13]

I didn't mind it though! It was nice to tucker down after a long day and read a nice long fic :)

I used to be able to read het stuff, but now, I just find more fun out of yaoi. I give some het fics a try every now and then, like I gave that het fic you wrote a try, but sadly, I couldn't get through it, sowwy >.<

Well, I feel that a few parts were alittle rushed, like the rope part. I was actually looking forward to reading that part. It was still really good, I just feel it was a wee bit lacking is all :) Your English is amazing if it's your second language!

[aleksiina_26]

Ah I see. It wasn't really that I rushed it, more that the sex really wasn't the focus of this particular story. It really was more about the dominant/submissive dynamics and the emotional aspects of it than the actual sex, unlike my usual porny writing, which is why I only hinted at the bondage and sex between them and didn't really elaborate. It was more of a conscious omission than me glazing over it.

Don't worry, I might very well be writing a bongage centric fic with those two in the near future, I really love the pairing ;) Thanks for your input its well appreciated :D

[jrockforver13]

Aaaah, after reading it again with that in mind, I get it haha. It's still a great story!

Ooh, can't wait! Again, great job!

[aleksiina_26]

I'm glad it clarified things for you :D And thanks again my dear xoxo