Good luck, Chauncey. I don't know when you are, but Stone may need you as an example, some day.
Also interesting is the description of the power transfer, both that it doesn't happen without some sort of decision by the surviving family -- what would happen if an Aunt died and nobody noticed for a while, would it just wait? -- and that there's an actual transfer of *something* ...
I'm confused about the Louisas, though. In the third paragraph, there's a Louisa who's too young, presumably the infant only child. Then in the sixth, there's a Louisa who got married at 27 and has at least one younger brother, Chauncey. Given that Louisa's being snarled at for not having kids earlier, I'm guessing she's the mother of the singleton infant, and either she and her daughter have the same name, or "Louisa" and "June" should be swapped in paragraph three?
Wait, then who's June with the only child? Does Louisa have multiple children who are too young? Or all boys so far?
Also, hrm, if Louisa would have been elegible, and Louisa's children would have been elegible, that means there's a skip-generation option, which I think hadn't come up before ...
I'd assumed that Jennifer was "the only potential ... an infant, currently an only child", with June-who-should-have-more-kids as her mother. I'd also assumed that Jennifer was not a younger sibling of Louisa and Chauncey. But maybe she is the baby of that branch, and June has only boys so far? That'd make her all proper. If Louisa had any girls, I'd've expected them to either be listed with Jennifer ... though maybe the skip-generation thing has them considered unqualified as well as too young.
No, wait, that doesn't work if Jennifer is an only child. I'm confused!
I think "Louisa has only boys" works fine with no further rewriting, once I prune my bad assumptions from thinking the-name-now-Jennifer and "June" should swap.
Also interesting is the description of the power transfer, both that it doesn't happen without some sort of decision by the surviving family -- what would happen if an Aunt died and nobody noticed for a while, would it just wait? -- and that there's an actual transfer of *something* ...
I'm confused about the Louisas, though. In the third paragraph, there's a Louisa who's too young, presumably the infant only child. Then in the sixth, there's a Louisa who got married at 27 and has at least one younger brother, Chauncey. Given that Louisa's being snarled at for not having kids earlier, I'm guessing she's the mother of the singleton infant, and either she and her daughter have the same name, or "Louisa" and "June" should be swapped in paragraph three?
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Also, hrm, if Louisa would have been elegible, and Louisa's children would have been elegible, that means there's a skip-generation option, which I think hadn't come up before ...
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No, wait, that doesn't work if Jennifer is an only child. I'm confused!
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