Apotheosis: Chapter 18 - Metamorphosis
Apotheosis
Chapter 18 - Metamorphosis
In the morning, Ichigo was up early and ready to go. He slung his knapsack with the last of his possessions over his shoulder and left without a backward glance. Renji followed silently, nursing a hangover but still smiling beneath the dark sunglasses shading his vision.
They stopped at the Kurosaki home ( Read more... )
Chapter 18 - Metamorphosis
In the morning, Ichigo was up early and ready to go. He slung his knapsack with the last of his possessions over his shoulder and left without a backward glance. Renji followed silently, nursing a hangover but still smiling beneath the dark sunglasses shading his vision.
They stopped at the Kurosaki home ( Read more... )
With the amount of fics I've read in-between installments of this one there's a lot of general mash running around my head but I'm gonna leave a comment with as much as I remember. It's almost a given I'll re-read this from start to finish again all in one go so you'll probably get another comment very soon :p
But anyways. Like I've said countless times before, I just can't believe how smoothly you write. Even the time and scene shifts seem to just flow from one to the other without confusion and general "where are we again?"-ness.
You've got great insight into the characters and their reactions to things. With the fights and Ichigo's mass explosion over the treatment of the 3rd, etc. If those situations happened in actual canon I wouldn't be surprised if they went down exactly how you described them. Sometimes, I'll admit, Ichigo and Renji did seem a little too sappy to me, but hey. You know me, so you know that probably doesn't count for much. 'Sides, it's a situation that you had no background information on in regards to how they'd actually behave so I really think you did well with them. The characterisation of even the people that only appeared briefly in this fic was also good. You've got such a good handle on the Bleach-verse I think I'm jealous :p The only thing I really feel the need to say (and this is just my opinion, mind you) is that I wish there'd been more Rukia. She's such an important person to both boys that it just seemed out of place that she wasn't there giving them shit more than she did.
In other aspects, like the fights with the hollows and just the general plot. You write fights as good as you write smut. You described them well enough that you could follow what was happening while at the same time not putting too much information in it so there wasn't too much happening at once. The smut was excellent, I don't think you need my comments on that since you already know what I think there :p
And the plot. What can I say? Just, soooo goooood. Your version of events just seemed to slot in and seem natural, as if this could conceivably be a route actual canon could take *flails*
I can't wait for the continuation! I wanna see how they deal with forever! And Ichigo being captain! FWEE!
And that pic? Dude, gorgeous! Hello, tatts... *___*
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I wish there'd been more Rukia, too. There just wasn't room, though. =/ I had a whole pile of ideas for scenes, but when it came to piecing things together, all the little extra bits seemed like distractions from the main storyline, and the threads got lost in the shuffle. I'm quite sad about that, actually. But that's ok... there's quite a lot more Rukia in the third story. :)
Sappiness... well I did what I could to keep them in character, and then I had to improvise the rest. We really don't know how they'd act in this type of situation, and while I don't think they'd be total saps, I know for darned certain that almost everyone is a little smushy with their lover, so I can get away with some of it. :P I tried to show a balance of different aspects of their personality - squabbling, angry, humourous, emotional, romantic, etc., while still remembering that part of the plot in the story was how they learned to be really together. If canon ever contradicts me on how the guys act in love, I'll try to fix it. ^_^ (Pet peeve: They're not 'boys'! Ichigo's only a boy in the current manga timeline, and Renji hasn't been a boy for more than 40 years. Semantics, I know... :P)
Yay for well-written action and well-written action! ^_^ One is much like the other, believe it or not. You just have to watch your pacing and keep track of where hands/swords are, what the hand/sword is doing, and what the hand/sword is going to do next. And only giving just enough information to set the scene, and not devolve into something like "His hand moved up his lover's thigh, across the hip, over the rippling stomach muscles and the smooth chest, and..." yanno? *laugh* I know you've read as much of that as I have, and that it makes your eyes roll just like mine.
DUDE, canon!? *flails with* Holy crap, yo. :) I think that's gonna go to my head. *^_^* Since we're not likely to get Renjigo pairing in canon, I guess being as good as will have to do, eh? *feels all shiny and special* ♥ Thank you.
The third story is still a ways away, but it'll deal with lots of things, old issues and new ones, and... a whole new plot, of course! Captain Ichigo and Captain Renji, together forever! Fwee indeed! :D *plays Metallica*
Mmmm tatts... So utterly gorgeous! Don't the guys have good taste in ink? *flops over* I totally want Ichigo's cuff on my ankle. That will pass in time, so it's a good thing I have some restraint! Now, where is my henna... :p
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(dude, pet peeve or not, I will call them 'boys'. I call the Winchesters 'boys' and they're both older than me. It's just one of my habits, so there.)
Mmm tatts. I still haven't got mine and I was supposed to get it on my 18th b'day. You know, a whole almost two years ago. I will get one this year!
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And mmm Winchester boys! ^_^ Have I mentioned yet today how much I like your icon?
I'm such a lazy... I want to get my tattoo, too, but I keep putting it off, saying, "I gotta be sure that I really want this!" *is lame* I'll go get mine if you go get yours! Help us, Dean!
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You're on. It's not a matter of really whether you want it or not (well, it is) but the more important question is to make sure you get something that you're gonna enjoy for the rest of your life. Since you know, youre kinda stuck with it :D *snickers*
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heeeheee Thanks! Say weren't you going to draw something for god ---- erm Akuni?
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