♥ 000 ♥ Crit and Contact

Apr 15, 2009 18:25

Just your standard Hows my Driving post.

Comment here with constructive criticism. How's my take on Chomesuke? Good, Bad? Please no wank or flaming. The last time I got wanked on I just about gave up rping on live journal ._.;

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rubberbandsnap June 9 2010, 22:13:24 UTC
I’m sorry if it upset you, but if you put up a concrit post you have to expect criticisms, especially if you’re serious about improving. Mostly I commented here because I didn’t want the only honest feedback you have to be from the anon meme, where everyone gets crazy wrapped up in wank and forget it’s a real person they’re talking about who can be hurt by their bitching.

You don’t need to give an excuse, nobody improves overnight. That you’re trying is good, and I have noticed her toning it down a bit. As I said, you’ve improved since you first started. Again I would suggest rereading the chapters. Everybody wants a thread to be about them once in a while, it’s fun when you get attention. But with Chomosuke it seems almost constant, instead of her saying ‘this is so similar to what I went through’ and then talking about something that really doesn’t relate, try keeping the focus on them for a bit? Others need time to work through their issues too. I can understand if you’re trying to make it so she can relate, but I think you need to re-evaluate your approach.

I remember when akuma Rabi was trying to cheer her up, and she slapped him for no reason. I remember her attacking Kuzu when he was a cat and teasing him for being scared that this girl who was bigger than him and could hurt him was angry and shaking him and saying she wouldn’t forgive him for something he couldn’t remember doing. (I may be remembering the wording wrong, it’s been a while since I read that thread). That’s the sort of thing I meant, it comes off as aggressive and Chomosuke taking her anger out on them. This isn’t something she does in canon.

Rape is a large conclusion to jump to, it’s unrealistic. And then again, she told others about Lavi’s trauma without the muns permission. If nobody tells you clearly, then ask. People will be more than happy to explain, it only takes a quick OOC note or a PM. Nobody is going to bite your head off for just asking, and it will be much less hassle for them than making inaccurate assumptions.

I remembered reading something about her playing favourites, that may be me remembering it wrong, in which case I apologise. But I do feel she plays them off against each other a bit, she was loyal to “gunlessgeneral”/ until “modified came along, and then she decided she liked him better I think? After only a few threads, her loyalty had gone from someone she considered the Cross from her world to this one who spent more time with her. It read as though her attachments and loyalty were worth nothing and she’ll go with anyone who is nice to her. Chomosuke is stronger than this, and fiercely loyal, I can see her acting that way. Again, I may be remembering wrong and you could be completely right, so don’t quote me on it. Staying away from Noahs is understandable, they’re Noahs.

I’m not saying give up completely, just come on less strong. When I read about her desire for a boyfriend because she wanted a close friend, it seemed to me like she was saying her other friends weren’t good enough and it seemed disrespectful to them. She didn’t value them because they wouldn’t kiss her? It was wall banger-y to me.

You explained just fine, and honestly I prefer ‘hiding’, I know anonymous comments aren’t valued as much but I feel more secure like this. In my opinion, this is the easier method. I would strongly suggest enabling anonymous commenting if you wanted more feedback on Chomosuke, some people are just more comfortable, and it means they can’t be judged. This is your journal however, and if you don’t want to then it’s up to you. I don’t mean to attack you, and it seems like you’re really trying hard to improve. It’s a slow process but you seem to be doing well so far, you’ve realised your faults and you’re taking steps to tackle them. Most people don’t ever admit they’re wrong, so don’t be upset, you’re already better than 90% of the players who need to improve because you can admit to it.

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akumaindisguise June 9 2010, 22:32:08 UTC
Oh, I've been there. I've seen the way. I know both Chomesuke, Sachiko and Miranda are basically the most disliked people in the DR. I'd leave and let them throw a party, but I do have people on my side that obviously courage me to stay and I don't want to disapoint them.

I was thinking of rewatching the whole series soon anyways. I've got the time.

Chome and Rabi have an odd relationship. And yes, that was a while ago. She was upset and things got out of control. Its been dealt with already. Anything with that Allen has already been dealt with. She does a good job at avoiding all my muses with all of hers. I think things are over with even though I'm upset with that out come.

She has a crush on modifiedmagic because he's younger and doesn't look like Cross, but she's still loyal to both of them and she adores both of them. She can say things, but the deep down loyalty doesn't change. It isn't like she's saying that because this one did this and this that he's going to get more respect and service out of her than any of the others. Yeah, if she gets attention up from then its all going to be on him for the moment, but she'll never say no to a Cross that needs her. What about the females? She's still loyal to them even though its a bit awkward and new. Same with the General Maria. She knows she meant a lot to him and respects her as much as she does him.

Its just the coming and going. People she thought were there for her weren't and so on. She's been betrayed and keeps her guard up. Lately she hasn't had many reliable friends she can really trust and count on who are around. I don't know where this kissing came from. She would enjoy a lot more than that. A simple conversation could beat kissing.

Uh... I kinda don't know how |D;
I knew when I made this entry that I'd get stuff like this because even though I've been rping for over a year I'm still terrible at it. I'm a slow learner when it comes to some things so I may not... uh? Be as good as others and come off totally... terrible. I can't think of a worse word. I like it better knowing who's addressing me so I can address them better. I don't want to feel like I have to be extra careful with a stranger and seem like I'm sucking up to them because I'm afraid of who's behind the mask. Yeah, I suck. I know. I've got buttloads of things to work on, but I also live in a stressful life style which sadly can seep it too because I'm an emotional person, but rp keeps me sane and happy. I do my best and its not always my fault too. Whatever problems happen I do want to fix them, but sometimes I need help with certain things and ugh, I'm just rambling with crap.

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rubberbandsnap June 9 2010, 22:53:27 UTC
At this point, I think it's mostly people holding grudges from back when you first started playing. You may not be the best rper out there, but you're far from the worst so don't be so hard on yourself. The road of redemption is long and hard, it might take months or even another year but if you keep trying to improve people will realize it. Some I know are never going to like you, but that's because certain people can't let things go. Accept it and move on, nobody can ever please everyone. As long as you're trying, really trying, nobody can fault you. Well, they can. But it would be mean.

Do you play from the anime or the manga? Most characters get skewed in the anime, so it might be adaption decay that's proving a problem too. Most people are more familiar with the manga, if you take it from the anime then it's important to explain the differences for those who don't know. But I would watch carefully, everything is not always clear. Like the Mimi fillers, you said Mimi was happy being an akuma because of what the Earl said, right? But I always took that scene as him being a dick and rubbing it in that her soul is suffering forever, 'aren't you happy maid now that your princess is dead and you're enslaved to us?' The Earl is a villain, and he lies. I wouldn't trust everything he says. The soul would still be being corrupted by dark matter and that hurts like a bitch.

Do you mean normal_really? That's not Kuzu. From my experience, that mun is really nice and friendly, if you're unhappy with what happened try talking to her about it. I have her aim if you'd like, I'm sure she's not upset. She's really bad at holding grudges. But you have tagged with her recently? Allen's wedding and collegiate Lavi's post spring to mind.

The Cross thing seems more like my misunderstanding the more you explain it, sorry. I get that everything she says shouldn't be taken for surface value.

Kissing was just an example of typical boyfriend girlfriend behavior, I wasn't saying all she's looking for is a make out session. Because of your reputation you can put a lot of people off so it's hard to maintain CR. The more you improve, the stronger CR she'll have with more people. Again it takes time, be patient and Chomosuke will make more friends.

Aha, I can barely figure out lj either. It's in account somewhere, I think? Or journal options, I can't remember. Try googling it.
I don't think you're sucking up to me. You're explaining yourself well and I can see you're really trying, don't worry. I don't think you have to worry about rambling, we're both doing it, it's a long winded back and forth! If you need help it's okay to ask for it, people would prefer that I think. It shows you're working on getting better and not just floundering around in the dark. I'll certainly be happy to help you with anything you have a problem with, even if it is just through sock puppeting.

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akumaindisguise June 9 2010, 23:23:41 UTC
I don't hold them. Thats the thing. They have them against me.

I do anime because she appears more in the anime than in the manga and more happens. The deal with Mimi is over all totally out there. It says they're happy, but there's no way it could be true. Even I know that.

I have her aim. That's the thing. Ever since the upset I'm sure she's blocked me or something because she is never online. Hell, we used to be good friends, but that thing was a misunderstanding and its all done with. Yeah, Chome still has feelings for Allen, but she doesn't hate Lenalee, she's not jealous about it and respects and is happy for their relationship. IT. IS. OVER. I tagged the wedding and Lavi's post. Lavi's with Sachiko only because they had a slight fight and haven't talked for ages. But there was another post where I tagged... Uh? I think it was normal really with another muse and they got blown off. I saw her tagged all the others more often than mine. So I feel like my muses are being avoided just because they're played by me. I know Chome has an awesome friendship with The Doctor. And I don't wanna kill that one. She still wants to drive tea with him. She's been practicing <3

Thats okay. Cross is Cross. She will be loyal to the death, but yes, she does seem to like others more than some only because she may only see one once and one a thousands of times and so she gains a better relatioionship with that one, but the one she saw once isn't going to be forgotten. If he suddenly appears, she's still going to take a bullet for him.

She enjoys attention, period. THAT is in her canon. She likes attention and is interested in cute things. Thus the love of little animals and children from time to time. But yeah. Once the stuff is fixed things will be better.

Normally I ask my friend for all my lj help. She's been on for way longer than me. Or I just leave it and deal with it as it comes. I just don't like it when people hide. I dropped another muse because of anon attacks. I like to know who is who so I know where said attack is coming from. It might be a misunderstanding or something real. Everyone has their own opinions of people... And I'm still trying to make friends <3 I enjoy knowing as many people hiding the scenes as I can to ask right away to do something or plot and jazz. Since I'm self conscious about everything I hate talking out in the open and wondering who is reading what and what they're saying about it.

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rubberbandsnap June 9 2010, 23:37:52 UTC
That's what I meant, other people holding grudges against you. You're trying to change, but your actions have hurt others in the past. That's going to take a while to get over. Don't give up because it's hard though, if you keep working like you are you'll be fine.

Fair enough. Just be aware that manga!Chomosuke and anime!Chomosuke are different, and most will expect manga.

To be fair, she has exams at the moment and has said she's going to be incredibly slow. I think she's only playing in the new baby DR for the moment, you could try catching her there if you don't mind OCs. I'll talk to her about aim, I'm sure she won't mind. And she dropped the Doc for a while, but I think she's bringing him back in once exams are over.

I can't remember that in canon. But it's not exactly a stretch with her, I suppose. She may like attention, but she doesn't force it on herself all the time. I like attention, but I still let the focus be on other people. She's quite selfless, just because she likes it doesn't mean she'll demand it all the time.

If anons are flaming you, that's just bitching you should delete. Valid, well thought out comments are the ones you listen to. I really hope this hasn't come across as an attack because I would love to see you improve rather than drop. I'm not perfect either, if it seems like I'm attacking you then tell me, this is meant to be constructive. Who did you drop? You shouldn't stop playing because others don't like it, you should try to improve. If someone is forcing you to drop then THEY'RE doing it wrong, that is not constructive criticism. That is bullying.

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akumaindisguise June 9 2010, 23:48:22 UTC
09. CHOMESUKE (SACHIKO)

Personal Data
Height: 167cm (Human form)
Weight: 53kg (Human form)
Interest: Collecting cute stuff
Likes: People who pay attention to her
Dislikes: Innocence

Tada~ When I get info I'll use it to the best of my ability.

I understand people being busy. My best friend is always busy, but I don't understand blocking all contact.

No no. You didn't post and run. You replied. You offered to help find a solution. You're not and evil anon flamer even though I don't know who you are. No one says they want me to drop, but I give up easily when things get too hard or too painful. When so many people hate and dislike you, you can't help but wonder what everyone is thinking...

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rubberbandsnap June 10 2010, 00:01:51 UTC
From the datebook, gotcha. You might want to make your sources clear, to avoid confusion. Like I said, even if she likes it she doesn't crave it in canon. Actually she might in the anime which I haven't seen, but in the manga she thinks of the others and keeps quiet about her problems until the end. This kind of adds a new dimension to her character, if she loves attention so much but as an akuma can't get much of it. She lives a lonely and sad life, and I think she would have gotten used to being distrusted or disliked so much. She is, at her core, a strong character which I don't think you play enough. She never whines about her problems, and though she likes attention she has learned not to seek it where she won't get it. This probably makes people like the Exorcists who actually liked her and thought of her as a comrade super special awesome, but still a rarity. I tend to over analyse things, what do you think with your anime insight? Again I don't know much about that portrayal.

Sometimes if you annoy a person too much, they need a break. I imagine the drama got too much for her and she needed to get away. She says she'll re-add you, and if you want to talk she's free.

Oh, thank you. I put a lot of thought into this concrit and really tried to make it helpful, thank goodness I didn't scare you off with my huge wall of text. Hate is a pretty strong word, people might dislike you or be annoyed, but actual loathing would be ridiculous. As long as you have fun, don't give in. If it gets painful then taking a step back might be good, but don't give up something you love where you can play with people you like. Nobody ever knows what everyone is thinking, you can't tell it in real life and you can't tell it here even if they're not hiding. I really don't feel comfortable de-anoning myself, sorry.

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akumaindisguise June 10 2010, 00:16:15 UTC
In the anime she went up and clung to Lavi, she also offered blood to Krory with no questions asked. She simply said "You want some?"

Thing with witty was just a misunderstanding as always. <3

Well, um... Okay... If you insist. Its not that I'd have anything against you, but I still feel the need to keep up appearances so to speak since i don't know who I'm speaking to...

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