My Former Lovers and Her Daughter ~Chapter 9~ Part 1
Title: My Former Lovers and Her Daughter ~Chapter 9~
Author: Ha-chan and her recent craziness (akinoyama)
Rating: PG-15
Genre: Family Life, Romance, bit angst later…
Warnings: Unbetaed, AU, Hikaru and Yamada’re girl, Terrible English
Pairing: Yabu x Hikaru, Yabu x OC, Yabu x Yamada, Yamada x Yuuto, Yabu x Yuuto
Disclaimer: The plot
Synopsis: Yabu and ( Read more... )
I mean.......the "stroking hair", "hesitating", "mumbled" & "slowly and carefully asked" can't compensate the lack of feelings in Yabu's speech XP
Sorry if I'm too critical this time XP
Just remember, all in all, your PLOT is always fantastic! Twists & details & cliffhanger etc etc~ Your ways of writing & presentation are nice, too!
It's only quite a bit of detatchment in Yabu's speech this time.
Detatchment as in... he sounded more like an outsider and observer instead of the one being involved =P
Like, if this wasn't a fic but it happened in the reality + I were Hika, I would have cried already hearing the way Yabu said everything DDD:
They do all look like neutral statements but they could appear harsh or a bit cold to the one who suffered all those mentioned ;A;
Aww, do u get me XPPP Gomenne......am I too demanding?!
And about the plot......I don't think it's someone else who impregnanted Hikari-chan~
Though that won't be the father, I can't reject the possibility that somebody did rape her or sth LOL She looks too delicious...LOL *hits myself for saying so*
I'm still wondering how helpless Hika was when she gave birth to Chihara alone, as a teenage girl T__T
Did she have her water broke on the street & Keito saw it, then helped her out? And then that's why Keito became a gd fd & caregiver afterwards?!
Or was Hika too shocked and in too much despair when he saw Yabu kissed Yama-chan that she nearly had a miscarriage???? Then Keito who walked by gave her a hand XP?!
Aw aw awwwww, Yabu Kota!!!!!!! You gotta compensate A LOT~!!!
Simply morning sickness is already horrible enough...I can't bear it...it makes you feel so bad...not to mention Hika even had extra loneliness, disappointment, insecurity, uncertainty, helplessness, lack of care PLUS she was only a high sch girl!!!
GOSH...my poor poor baby T___T
Thank you so much, Ha-chan!!!!!
This multi-chap is still SAI KOU DA YO <3333333333
Love you so very much and wanna read an update of this EVERY DAY LOL
I got so much anticipation & high expectation XDDD You're a great writer as always =3=
I really hope this is not even half way of this fic =w=+
Thanks again, my dear!
P.S. Sorry for still not updating any YabuHika CON REPO XPPP
I do wanna share the RABURABU but I don't have strength to type them up...'coz...I dunno how to explain ;__;
P.S. LOL My comment's too long LJ didn't let me post it so I separated them into 2 parts XD;;;
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My comment above exceeds 1000 words LOL
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Give me time to read.......
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Nope... I never watched the drama nor read the manga... ^^
It's true... Hikari-chan...is super duper yasashii hito... until made Yabu fell in love...
LOL.... Hikari-chan should got angry.... however... she did not want to make Yabu got sadder and desperate...
Eh... you made the sreencaps???
Hikaru comforted Yabu??? WANNA SEE! WANNA SEE!
Yeah... yeah... there's misunderstanding... nope... it's just miscommunication... I think.... LOL....
Yeah... He just too confused and Hikaru's the one who can make him calmer and comfortable... until he can say something fluently....
And actually Yuuto's P.S. in his letter... triggered him to do so.... I hope it can make sense although it's quite hard to make someone change his/her feeling in short time...
Hahahahahahaha.... Yabu's the EGOIST from the start.... LOL.... *gomen Yabu's fans*
I'm sorry for that dialogues.... It's simply Yabu wanted to prevent Hikaru's argument or denial later on... and forced her to tell the truth of everything....
Etou... from your repo... I got an image of Yabu being a harsh person to others.... so perhaps... I was inspired and then quite over exposed it here....
Yes... he knew Hika's not a player... but just think... a long distance love isn't easy.... sometimes you'll feel insecure about the relationship.... and there're many times prejudice come to your mind...
Hmm... Yuuto's death really influenced him... He had lost many people he loved... so he wanted to do anything not to lose someone again...
I hope your wish will come true.... LOL....
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Hey... Hika's indeed CRY..... You'll see it in the next chapter... and Yabu regretted his acts... LOL....
*Owh... I give a SPOILER....*
NO comment for Hika's pregnancy this time... I'll comment in the next chapter.... xP
O_O Hika's delicious body......
Your curiosity will be answered after this chapter being completed....
Dun worry.... Yabu'll pay everything later....
You're welcome....
Hahahaha.... A DAILY UPDATE IS IMPOSSIBLE for someone like me.... moreover if it's a multi-chapter stuff....
Yeah... It's not half... It's NEAR THE END.... SERIOUSLY....
Thank you so much for commenting in a very long way.... stevenica-chan
P.S. Ii yo... I think if Hara-chan's ability in Japanese have improved... She'll kindly help you out...
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