Chapter Fifteen-- Scene III

Feb 27, 2009 00:41

GOOP!

Scene III )

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airian_reesu February 27 2009, 16:19:49 UTC
Yeah, I realized that scene was a bit over-dramatic, but I blame it on watching cop shows and not ever talking to a police officer in such a situation myself. XD That, and I was going for the emotions, so... Hey, it's fanfiction! XDD I did think about going back to fix it, but the flow was just sooo good and...then I'd be at it for another two hundred years, so...yeah.

I caused a Fangirl Melt. Yay! ^__^ *gets out the Fangirl mop*

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airian_reesu February 27 2009, 22:07:54 UTC
I'm curious, btw: Is there anything I could add (or subtract) easily from that scene to make it seem more realistic? (So if I ever get around to editing this beast, I'll know.)

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airian_reesu February 28 2009, 14:37:01 UTC
Hmm.... Yeah, those all make sense. XD

Well, since none of them are actual "suspects" so much as "witnesses" they might do the initial questioning on-site. *Maybe* That's what I'll go for when I edit it (because I'm doing that today since it bothers me.)

Yeah, I'll admit I used Hide as a bit of a gimmick just to get the scene to end, or those two would be glaring at each other forever. XD

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