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airgiodslv

Disengage (1/2)

Jan 02, 2004 18:19

Title: Disengage
Pairing: OB/EW
Rating: R
Summary: Advance, retreat, disengage.
Website: http://www.airgiodslv.dombillijah.com/
Disclaimer: This is a complete work of fiction, no disrespect intended.
Notes: Thank you to everyone who has helped me write this; msilverstar, kaydeefalls, impasto, arabia764, and mdbfan. ( Read more... )

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Comments 10

pecos January 3 2004, 03:31:58 UTC

Heavens, darling...I don't know if I have the nerve to go on!

airgiodslv January 3 2004, 08:06:48 UTC

Oh, please do! Um...it gets better?

*hugs*

bungee January 3 2004, 07:24:29 UTC

I just have to stop and comment here on your beautiful attention to detail.

Elijah carefully set his drink in Orlando’s condensation-ring.

Orlando supposed that it meant something.

It was interesting to read this. I think we all have our own little quirks like that, things that we do that others might not understand, and I think it was amazing that you included it.

The other thing that struck me was when Orlando was observing the color of the sheets, and contrasting how he looked against them versus how Elijah did. Beautifully written.

Well, I just wanted to make those comments before I forgot them, and now I'm off to read the next part. :)

airgiodslv January 3 2004, 08:11:16 UTC

Thank you...one of the most important things I've learned from other writers in this fandom is that quirky characters are interesting characters. And you're absolutely right...we do all have those weird little tics that make us real...that make us human.

I'm glad you commented on the sheets, as well! That has always been one of my favorite images from this story. *g*

sophrosyne31 January 3 2004, 14:31:09 UTC

O you dear creature, you know about fencing! I am now confirmed as your bitch. (I'm going to learn fencing this year, I have been resolved.

Keeping feedback till I read the next part. You've already succeeded in flattening all the breath out of my lungs. You minx.

O, gorgeous, gorgeous...

airgiodslv January 10 2004, 11:20:32 UTC

Darling! I swear I replied to this once, but it seems to have disappeared. Anyway...I know next-to-nothing about sport fencing, I'm afraid, but I have been trained in single-sword (mostly rapier) stage( d ) combat. You must tell me all about your fencing lessons so that we can compare notes!

Thank you...

sophrosyne31 January 10 2004, 13:08:27 UTC

You did reply! I fb'd for Part 2. But you are too conscientious (not that I'm complaining...)

It's the couture of fencing that gets me. Great silhouette. Oh yes and also the derring-do. Swash Swash Buckle Buckle and so forth. I am looking forward to being lithe, intent and dangerous. I like your use of the word 'combat'.

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airgiodslv January 10 2004, 11:34:54 UTC

you sound like you know what you're talking about.

Thank you! I have been a stage( d ) combat junkie for three years now, so it was nice to work it into a story. Sword-slash!

that's real rps, right there.

That is an amazing compliment, thank you. I'm glad that people seemed to identify well with him in this story.

i'm surprised when he chuckles against orlando's throat. he seems too ethereal.

Intriguing observation! I would say that Elijah is careful...very, very careful. And this does translate into 'cold' or 'aloof.' I find him very real; just untouchable.

queenofalostart January 18 2004, 17:55:22 UTC

“If this happens,” Elijah said quietly, offhandedly, “it never happened. Is that okay?”

What a line! Seriously brill.

*rushes to part 2*

airgiodslv January 24 2004, 01:12:58 UTC

Thank you!

*rushes to respond!!*